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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Empty heart of circumstance wallflower at the dance trying to avoid each glance and stop my toe from tapping... Turned away, left unappraised, a teardrop stain on journal's page. Closed the book, my entry made: "He never asked me..." |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
left unappraised, a teardrop stain on journal's page. serenity, this piece touches the longing inside of us all to be loved and desired...most enjoyable. Robert Joseph |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
Boy does this strike a nerve, you have in a few words been able to capture the emotion of the left out. This screams out LOOK AT ME !! TALK TO ME !!! GIVE ME A CHANCE !! VERY touching I hurt for her as I read every word. Excellent!  To [This message has been edited by The Lonely Stranger (edited 10-13-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ You brought the tearful moment to life ! Sweet nostalgic write. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~ I know how this feels..you went straight to the heart on this one......  -SEA |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Heartfelt indeed..i remember those days wanting to be a teenager..and hurt that the pretty teenage girls were getting the dances instead of me.. as i stood with my ankle socks on haa.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
RJ---I don't believe I've greeted you properly...Welcome to passions, and thank you for your kindness. I'm trying to catch up on my reading now... LS--thank you again for the much-needed smile. Marge--I've missed you! Thanks and hugs. Sea---thank you much. I enjoy your work also. Victoria--y'know, I seldom went to dances and this is why...was total terror for me. Believe it or not, I was painfully shy. Thanks for reading! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Serenity... The flow of rhyme and expression you have penned touches this reader from far away need I say I found this to be a lovely poem and enjoyed the read! Coco |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Serenity...exactly why I never went to dances LOL...what did teenage boys know anyway? This just hurts |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Coco--I thank you much--you're always so good to me! Paula---thanks for understanding, and your kind reply!!! Much appreciation folks!!! |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
serenity ... a keeper ... great last line ... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Powerful words Serenity Turned away, left unappraised, a teardrop stain on journal's page. Closed the book, my entry made: "He never asked me..." I hope all is well, take care. excellent poem. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well written, Serenity. You've expressed the heartbreak very well. Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Im here ... sorry Im late for the dance... had to go out into the real world and GUESS WHAT??? "there is PEOPLE OUT THERE"   LOL*winkiewinkie* anyway .... *sigh* .. me knows ... me knows ... and ya need to do you candle dance... or your rain dance ... you are many things me sweet... a wallflower you are not ... me thinks you are just patient  me loves ya and this lil jewel of your heart me |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
very nicely done.....reminds me of me...quiet, shy, wallflowerish, never get any attention or respect....yep....good poem, |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Is that music I hear??? Yeppers it is.... Louder and stronger than ever my friend! The music of poetry in motion! This one hits so many familiar notes that I could sing the words with you...but now let me tell ya...It's time to Dance sweet S'en! Love ya~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
May I have this dance?  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mark--thanks m'friend! brian--I'll bet yer kickin' butt at school, (suspect you're kind of smart) grin....but thanks for poppin' in as I am always glad to hear from you! Denise--thank you for your kindness Toerag?--what a shock. But thanks you for your kind reply as well. Janet Marie--I KNOW there's people OUT there--that's why I'm IN HERE...ya just don't know, I'm a MAGNET FOR LUNATICS...oh. well. but then again, mayber you do...ROFL..LOVE YA TWIN... Holly---thanks bunches, love ya lots lady! Hopefully we can "catch" up soon...life has been weird lately... and Mark angelheart...It would be my honor, sir... (Look Everybody, I'M DANCING....) thank you kind people. |
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