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Rattling Bars of Comfort's Cage
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Rattling Bars of Comfort's Cage |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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A silken web, wove intricate a gossamer of kiss denied to sip of Holy Grail too late alive, within the funeral pyre. The fate of death a block from home to rattle bars of comfort's cage... a whisper's breath that chills my bone a spark that fires restless rage. A parch of thirst-- may heavens burst--- and drown my sorrow of alone... to touch the face of thing misplaced and wake, to call my life my own. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
S'en I can't even touch this one with proper praise...this blew through me like a cold knowing wind....the bars are rattling baby! Love ya ((hugs)) Awesome work!!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity-- and drown my sorrow of alone... to touch the face of thing misplaced and wake, to call my life my own. wonderful work...and the last line ..great! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
*shaking my head* What am I going to do with you? Submit this!!!!!!!! Please!!!! You are so good - I loved this..it's crisp and clean and wonderful!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
to rattle bars of comfort's cage... a whisper's breath that chills my bone a spark that fires restless rage. A parch of thirst-- may heavens burst--- and drown my sorrow of alone... to touch the face of thing misplaced and wake, to call my life my own. ================ jeeze baby...whats in that flu bug ya had... poetic fever.... my GOODNESS... i dont know what blows me away more.. the mirrors or how with each new poem... you take it to another level ... talk about working on your craft... and all without raspberry tea *winkiewinkie* your kickin poetic but here me sweet sen... and me loves it me |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Holly---I know you know. Love ya much too. I hope ya know that. smile, please. Martie--I'd roll out the red carpet, and I'm sure there's some er...wise guy, who could do it for you, but not me...sigh...but I thank, that is such an honor, to hear from you. PdV----LOL, okay, okay, for YOU, I will submit...(yer too kind, lady...) and m'girl, me twin---thank you luvie, wish you'd write tho...and I'm well, and I thank you over and over and over again for all the love and kindness you've given, so unselfishly...yer beaut-e-full!!!! |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Absolutely fantastic write! Smiles for you  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Okay so you have been hiding and just getting better at your verse. HHHHHmmmmm so is this fair. Now how do you ever expect me to keep up with you on this one HUH? It isn't fair I tell ya. You know I loved this as I do all that you put up and one last question. How come you submit to PdV...but to this cowboy....???? ahhhh nevermind the public would never understand.LOL....hugs my sweet friend. |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Wonderful job with this one, so descriptive and sensing. Job well done |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thank you insect...means much to me, as I am quite a fan of yours...love your sense of humor! Mark---Help! I am being held hostage in the Poetry workshop! send lawyers, guns, and a thesaurus! LOL...Hugs to ya, angelheart... thunder---thanks for your kindness as well...I have been enjoying your work much as well... |
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