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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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"HOPE" What honor shone before the throne, Hath dream cast to the Gods? What magic hone of wing flapped drone Hath there yet given odds? What candid tone minced here, alone, Yet stirs the soul within? All candor thrown upon this stone, Engraved, a mark of sin... By what caprice, donned sweet release, Dost thou bespeaketh me? Hast thou by eyes of green gray skies Laid siege Eternity? What wrongs redressed hath lie caressed To hold me to this truth? Embittered frost upon the lost Visions of catered youth. Dream dipt folly, melancholy, So surely thou dost bleed. By Time adept, by soul inept, To meet me in this need. By bleakest dawn wherein upon Hope flown hath found new wings... Unto the sky by teary eye, Now fly that Darkness sings. Cradled by night, held ever tight, In arms of riven trust. If to hold dear in balk of fear, This dream given to dust. By starry night, by heaven bright, Now dawns the day of laughter. Lo, heed the cry, for this I'd die, One kiss, here - ever after. Michael Anderson [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 05-01-2000).] |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Let me be honest.... I didn't understand this one fully so I will read it again when others have replied that I can see how they interpret it and see if I can see what they can see. Sorry about this. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
What is this song thou hears alone, That stirs the soul within... To purchase lot upon the stone Engraved the mark of sin? -------------- What wrongs redressed hath lie caressed To hold me to this truth? Embittered frost upon the lost Visions of catered youth ---------------------- By bleakest dawn wherein upon Hope flown hath found new wings... Unto the sky by teary eye, Now fly that Darkness sings. --------------- By starry night, by heaven bright, Now dawns the day of laughter. Lo, heed the cry, for this I'd die, One kiss, here - ever after. ---------------- I always love when you write in this stlye... makes for a lavish beautiful poem... perfect rhyme... never give up hope M, and it wont give up on you... sometimes its all we have to make us get up each day... that and our writing... excellent work here, once again. OOPS ~E~ word (smile) you seem to Evoke them  take care kind poet, jm |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I like the uplifting turn at the end of this beautifully wrought poem.. After all you've been through, dear...a day of laughter, no...a lifetime of laughter is due to you. To be shared with whom you love, and who loves you so dearly in return. May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
you've written this reflection with a tenderness few might have found, Michael. Thank you. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Lyrically lovely, St. Michael... me likes very much... and yet...what is this recurring underlying theme of 'stone' that I have noticed of late? Do Tell...am incredibly curious..... |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Micheal, You have an excellent way with archaic language...you bring it back to life with all of its romantic and medieval characteristics. I very much enjoyed this poem. |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Beautiful....i feel as if I've opened an ancient book of archaic verse and struck gold. Excellent poem. Bobbycat =^..^= |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
from someone who dreams of visiting her native Ireland, to see the gothic castles, and the tales filling the air even now, and to hear mist played at dawn, I love your poetry. When I am completely and utterly in despair I read yours, why? Michael, I don't know!! it makes me feel at home. thank you for writing it. Kathleen indy31_99@yahoo.com |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
ESP, hehe... I can be a bit obscure at times, I know. Aprreciate your efforts though Janet, Hope is a big part of who I am me thinks. I would be nothing without it. Nicole, Indeed, it's time. There is much joy to be shared where love is true. Claire, and I thank you... serenity - Hmmm... don't really know what's up with the "stone" thing... Probably just turning hard in my old age... I'll give you a soft one here soon o.k. warmhrt, It's nice to meet you - and I thank you kindly for your comments. I love Middle English though I am not as polished in using it as I once was. Who knows, maybe I'll start writing in this manner more often. bobbycat, Quite the compliment there, my sincerest thanks. Irish Rose, Ireland is a place I'd love to visit someday. I am fascinated by the old castles and the scenery I've seen in pictures. I am honored you find my poetry so soothing. Thank you all for the kind replies, Michael |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like it - I like it... You do well with internal rhyme, Michael.. It really adds a wonderful flow to your work.. and I like the final stanza best - hehe.. as I do in most of your work - because that's where you always put the "positive" verse.....  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Incredible style and rhythm Michael ... your pen flows with the language of old, combined with ageless emotion. Beautiful ... /Kit McCallum |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
All I can say is "stunning" work here...much better. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
absolutely lovely, I too am a big fan of medieval times, writing, language...keep these ones coming sweets *hugs* ~X~ |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Ok Michael, giving this a go again! Actually, the more I read it, the more I see of its beauty. Hope is precious and so is this poem...thanks for the read! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Darkly beautiful, Michael. Corinne |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
If I were anyone but me, I do believe this would be a swoon-thumper ... LOL Magnificent -- and in archaic language, to boot -- methinks I may have met my match, at least where olde englishe is concerned ... In a word -- awesome, m'friend! (whoops -- that's two ...) --Me< !signature--> Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest [This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 05-03-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
I don't know how I missed this one. Most superb m'friend, but I didn't expect anything less.... All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Micheal, this is truely a beautiful poem. Magnificant job! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Beautiful poem. I especially loved this line. "By starry night, by heaven bright, Now dawns the day of laughter." Most lovely. "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Nan, LOL...on the one "positive" verse. TY for the compliments. Kit, some emotion is ageless, indeed. Femme, eh - better than what? X-Angel, Knowing what a big fan of Shakespeare you are, I am smiling to know you enjoy my meager attempts. Lizzie, glad you came back to it and found some beauty in it. Corinne, much beauty lurks in darkness me thinks. Kess, well this is my first official "swoon-thumper"...ROFL Say it isn't so - you were actually impressed? Jeffrey, you say you don't know how you missed it - I still wonder how so many of you found it...LOL I didn't really think of much of this when I first posted it... Love Bug, I'm so glad you enjoyed it... Dawn Eclipse, Laughter to me is a gift from God - for those lucky enough to have received it. That line is one of my favorites also. Thank you all for the kind replies. Michael |
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