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Somnambulist (one who acts in their sleep)
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Somnambulist (one who acts in their sleep) |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again 
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SOMNAMBULIST Your face is dancing around my eyes as I close them and try to sleep tonight. I replay the day’s events in my mind. What was it I did wrong this time? I breathe in the air and drift away to that place where we first met. My arm around you, we laugh and talk. But I haven’t left my bed. Your voice when you laugh, it sounds so warm. Hold you close; I’ll never let go. My ears wake up; I’m talking to the ceiling. Look through the dark; I’m clutching a pillow. We walk to your car… I walk down the hall. My shoe looks untied… trip on the cat and fall. When you talk, I hear a jumbled noise… shouldn’t have left the radio on. you didn’t have to hide behind a smile. you didn’t have to lead me on. Why did I latch on so quickly? it’s just that misery that lasts. You mumble the answers in my sleep, but in my dreams you talk too fast. And I hate to put any words in your mouth, but you never wanna talk to me. We can never walk alone, unless I’m walking in my sleep. I never get a straight answer from you. you spin my heart around. My dreams can only remember all those times that you turn me down. Sometimes my self acts out my dreams. I walk around when I sleep. But I think your sleep is restless too, because you kill me every time I sleep. |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Even though i'm the author... i thought it was worthy of someone readin it... i mean besides me. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family Ethan! Sorry about the delay in reading your first poem...this time of night is pretty quiet.... please check your email for a special message.. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Welcome Ethan....this was a very interesting read. I liked the way it looped around itself, like the Midgaard serpent, eating it's own tail...then the finishing lines: 'But I think your sleep is restless too, because you kill me every time I sleep.' Very poignant way to bring this one to a close. Wow. Alicat |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions.  Generally I am not in the forums at this hour of the morning. (tucked warmly under the covers) but I am glad that I am. I did enjoy your poem and I agree with Ali. Welcome again. |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Poet DeVine: Thanks for the encouragement and the FANTASTIC e card. WOW! i love it!! Alicat: i appreciate it. glad you liked it. We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
I think I will agree with Alicat on this one...I love the way you wrap it all together, in a loop. This flows very smoothly; I enjoyed it. Bobbycat =^..^= ~~ And it harm none, do what ye will.~~ |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
I missed this first one, while I was reading another of yours, and I am stunned with the power of your writing and your pain. Excellent poetry. ~ ~ ~ P.S. The one I was reading before was "The Story of an Hour". < !signature--> The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. [This message has been edited by Rosemary J. Gwaltney (edited 04-29-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ethan~ Welcome to Passion's. Nice entry. Look forward to reading more. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Welcome to passions. Great first post. I love the way this weaves in and around itself. All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 This was Wonderful!! You're first entry here is a great story of things to come Hope you enjoy it here as much as I and so many others do...welcome to Passions!!Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading this...very creative. James |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very interesting poem--and I have to agree about the last line--perfect..and welcome to Passions! |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Welcome to Passions Ethan! What a great poem to start out with. Got my attention! "And I hate to put any words in your mouth, but you never wanna talk to me. We can never walk alone, unless I'm walking in my sleep." So heart wrenching. netswan |
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