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A Love Story
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A Love Story |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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(this is a true story) A Love Story A wooden swan on a small lake in the middle of central park took the children round and round then locked away at dark. Its weathered wings had splintered and its paint was wearing thin but it was dearly loved and treasured by all that rode within. Its ritual went unnoticed by all but special few who appreciated nostalgia’s winged watertight view. Around the lake it wandered enchanting little boat when real swan became besotted beside it would daily float. Live swan became so amorous he did a swan love dance and showed his feathered passion but he didn’t stand a chance. She circled right on by him with head still and erect and the sounds of happy laughter came from lovers on the deck. He gave devotion faithfully as steadily he swam beside his love in circles until dark and day’s end. Then he curled up beside the place where she was kept at night to dream of finally capturing his love in swan delight. A swan mates for a lifetime and wooden boats decay now he searches the empty water and waits for her today. So faithful in his tribute forever in his care that he still swims circles daily in the lake that they had shared. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 04-26-2000).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Now that's what I call true love! Great little poem, Martie! Corinne |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Beautiful and touching piece, Martie ... As always, excellent imagery .. Love this .... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hey, is that where the song came from "Swanie, how I love ya, how I love ya"? Nothing is sadder that decaying love..maybe next time he should pick a plastic one! Yes, Martie, I am officially losing it!  Actually, I love the story line and the way you presented it. Between you with the fake and real swan...and Sy with his chicken and cat, I'm waiting for someone to write about the hyena who wanted the giraffe but just wasn't up to it! Or the turtle who raped the snail and when the cop asked the snail what happened, she said "I don't know. It was all so fast!!!" OK OK I'm gone. Thanks, Martie! I needed that! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne and Pepper, thanks so much for your sweet comments. Balladeer--Actually, it was Sy's poem that reminded me of this story I saw in the paper a couple of years ago...and as far as loosing it goes...well, you just should have gone dancing.  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I swear ! This is soooooo precious. I remember the story that you're referring to also. LOL at that Balladeer ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thanks, sweet Marge, I thought you would like this, knowing how you love....love. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is adorable, Martie! I love it! Denise |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Oh, no, the poor swan! It didn't have the sense it was born with - no, wait - let me think - most of our human kind fall in love just like that - unplanned and without thinking it through, full speed ahead - no one can deter love when it happens. Poor, poor swan, though! Excellent poem! Really excellent! ~ ~ ~ The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey you - where'd the rhyme come from! Wow! Envying here....  Good stuff Martie....K |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Martie, Well, they all's done used the good lines but I just wanted to say... I had to go to years of school to get any wit at all and I still haven't gotten anywhere with it. It must of been one of them classes like Algebra they thought we all needed. It's sad to find the life we've wasted swiming in circles. If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley) |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Martie, This is just presious, so lovely, true love wow, thank you for this beautiful poem, I am going to share with all of my friends. Cerenity |
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