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Morning, Evening Haiku
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Morning, Evening Haiku |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Morning solitude pale moon shy in western sky dreams meet attitude Morning attitude cannot wait for night to come Dream Weaver, greet me Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i liked this esp the first haiku in which "solitude" and "attitude" rhymes!  ")  Morning sun rises~ Eager wait for it to fall~ Calming evening sets Evening stars shine~ Lights too dim for my taste,Ooh For the sun to rise! your 2nd haiku mentioned being discontented with the morning so i have attempted to do those two for you ") am i right?[This message has been edited by kaile (edited 04-21-2000).] |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sunshine, These are just lovely, thank you for sharing. Cerenity |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kaile - a reader who "reads" into the poem...wonderful! However, my intent was to express leaving a wonderful dream with morning's interruption...and wanting so much to go back to the dream [as you might tell, I dream a lot]. I am never discontented with a new day - but there are moments where I wish I could go back and capture the last remnants of that "wonderful dream" for mine are very real, indeed. Your pieces are well-done [in my less than expert eye] and I thank you for them. Sunshine... Cerenity, thank you for your comment... |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nicely written Sunshine. A pleasant read first thing in the morning. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
These are very lovely, Sunshine! Denise |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sunshine~ Beautifully done. So completely you have captured the way I feel when a dream is just TOO good to awaken from. Have a great week, gal. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Lovely~ Sunshine~ Tracie~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Mike, denise and Tracie... Marge, I figured the second verse would get you!... |
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