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A repost of an OLD one....anyone remember me? Tell me what you think!
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A repost of an OLD one....anyone remember me? Tell me what you think! |
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Newguy Junior Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 36Moultrie, GA, USA |
The Black (The Beginning) I open my eyes and enter the day, The Black it starts stirring, it eats me away. I bathe and I ponder what things come my way, The Black it is stirring, it eats me away. So I empty my mind, put a smile on my face, Still the Black it engulfs me and without a trace, I fade into sorrow, succumb to its grasp, And I see it, I feel it, and I hear it laugh. I'm helpless, I'm lost, I realize that now. There is no escape from His all-encompassing brow. So I cry and I suffer, shake my fists at the sky, Wishing for the moment, the time I shall die. Still the Black it continues to shatter my soul, To cloud my mind, to garnish control. And I see it, I feel it, and I hear it laugh, As He crushes my heart and tears me in half. I wish He were gone, this creature of pain Then parts of myself I could somehow regain. I scream....I shudder...I cry for the end! Help me! Please help me! How have I sinned? And I see it, I feel it, and I hear it laugh, The Blackness of lonely, two torn in half. The Black (The Struggle) There once was so much, now there is none. My life, my soul, and my world are undone. The Black it still laughs, still swallows me whole. But inside I'm stronger, I've recaptured control. I glare at this monster, He that gives me such grief. My God how I yearn for extended relief! So I fight and I struggle, on this life's behalf, I still see it, still feel it, and I still hear it laugh. Empty I am, cold and so scared. Yet something inside me continues to dare.... To fight this beast, to win, to live! The Black, though, is eternal, and takes what I give. My battle, my growth, my sanity's rebirth, The Black and its power, its evil, its girth. I still see it, still feel it, still hear it laugh, But with strength beyond strength my spirit will last. The Clash of the Titans, a life-altering event The Black He surrounds, and now I am bent On ending this darkness, ending His reign With no pity or relent, I've so much to gain! I still see it, still feel it, still hear it laugh, This Blackness inside me, I'm broken in half. The Black (The Conclusion) The war that has ravaged, torn through inside, Now comes to its end, my heart now not tied. He is still fighting, still clawing my mind But I return what He throws; even more of its kind. The immortal sense of being, the reaper of hearts, Has destroyed me so long, too long, now I start To fell the beast, to overcome His craft, I can still see it, still feel it, and still hear it laugh. Towards the future, my mind it now turns The struggle of past, my mind it now burns. The Black in his evil, lasting, and guise, Has incited a power in me to arise. The power of calm, my inner being grown, The strength to be happy, the evil inside, gone. I can still see it, still feel it, still hear it laugh Though finally, thank God, I face it and gaff! I stab him with knowledge, pierce him with love For that is the power, the white of the dove. He is no longer such an overpowering beast.. There is now no struggle, just beauty and peace. I still see it, still feel it, still hear it laugh, But now I am one, not two, or a half. The Black (Looking Back) (6-5-00) Looking back on this entity, this horrid, vile creature Looking back on my struggles, lifes important teachers, Puts that smile on my face, that gleem in my eye, I know I have triumphed, tears finally gone dry. That Blackness, that immortal symblance of pain, Has lost its firm grasp, been stripped of its reign. Now with my great victory, the defeat of His wrath, I still see it, still feel it, but no more does it laugh. Deeply inside it is so crystalline clear No matter what happens, He will always be here. Here lurking.... here stalking....awaiting my weakness, Assured of His strength, assured of my meakness. My Civil War of feelings has come to its end, The Black is defeated, relief my newest friend. I still see it, still feel it, but no more does it laugh, As a new emotion consumes me, steps forward, comes aft, A feeling of joy....of pride from within I've repelled His attack, am content once again. Oh God, such a feeling of emptiness, been filled Oh God what a powerful loneliness, been killed. I still see it, still feel it, but no more does it laugh, And I know, smile again, its my turn to laugh. This is my favorite poem  )I just wanted to know everyones opinion!!! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
it's NEWGUY yuh yuh yuh i remember yuh o and yuh lissen i remember these well got excited tho now i gotta read the conclusion it better be better than the phantom menace.. ok i read it and I remember talkin to yuh in ICQ and we were both goin thru dark times i think and its good to see you can look back and have some peace i too have found it  [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-06-2000).] |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
I am sorta' new here..but my opinion is...This Is Great!!! I love it. NewGuy...He CAN NO LONGER be assured of your meekness, the Blackness IS defeated. Congratulations on a great story/poem and on the ' new-you'. MagnoliaBlue Pay a visit to: http://cyberageadventures.com You will love it! "A poem is just an expression of my life and heart."*CJB* ~*Skipper Jim, I love you!Your Lady June*~ |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Hi NewGuy I have not been here that long to have met you before. This is quite a story. I am so glad it had a happy ending. Welcome Back ~netswan |
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Newguy Junior Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 36Moultrie, GA, USA |
Thanks guys. I wrote those parts months (and over a year for the last one) apart. Most people like it. Oh, and let me be cocky for a moment. Everyone check out www.poetry.com and look me up on there (Keith Hargraves) to see a couple more of my poems )Haven't posted in awhile. It's good to be back. And Walt, long time no hear. Nice to see you're still alive ) |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Newguy! I remember you Glad to see another 'old-timer' who disappeared has returned. Hope to see more from you. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Newguy, you are a 'new guy' no more! Nice to 'read' you again.  |
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