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PoetasterD
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since 2000-06-03
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Florida

0 posted 2000-06-05 09:27 PM


Many times I have gazed into the depths of blue
hoping to catch a glimpse of the treasures below
Longing to discover what secrets lie buried
under the beautiful blue

Though I try I see not what lies below
for the storm driven waves, opaque, the surface make
Only blurry images of distorted treasures I see
under the beautiful blue

Hours I spend praying for an end to the depression
that feeds the storm driven waves rolling in
Only to obscure my view of the treasure
under the beautiful blue

Helpless to intervene I can only watch and hope
as ripples grow to waves never ending
The storm far off reaches here even still
under the beautiful blue

But alas I see a break in the cloudy sky
as calm slowly replaces the waves
For one brief moment I can see below
under the beautiful blue

And as I peer ever deeper into the depths
what wondrous treasures to me are revealed
By rays of sunshine reflected back at me
under the beautiful blue

And though I long to explore the depths
I fear the ripple I may cause
That would steal the beauty I appreciate so
under the beautiful blue



© Copyright 2000 M. Derek Drudge - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-06-05 10:14 PM


Very, very impressive! So much can be read into this poem. The metaphors and double-entendres are really used well. I would be proud to write this one. Excellent work...
Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-06-05 10:22 PM


impressive indeed...
amazing imagery in this...
both of visual and emotional
wonderful wording and phrasing
very well written
take a bow for this one PoetTD  
take care, jm


 I think I could need - this in my life
I think I'm just scared - that I know too much
I can't relate and that's a problem
I'm feeling ...
If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home
There's an awful lot of breathing room
But I can hardly move
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
cuz there's a little bit of something me...
In everything in you.
~MB20~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


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Florida's Foreverly Shores
3 posted 2000-06-06 06:25 AM


PoetTD~
How artfully presented are your thoughts.
The emotions run deep 'under the beautiful blue'.
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
4 posted 2000-06-06 06:58 AM


This poem brings so many things to mind, longing, dreaming, wishing, and the frear that when you get what you want it loses its charm.
PoetasterD
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 42
Florida
5 posted 2000-06-06 08:20 PM


Thank you all for such gracious comments! It is one thing to have the person who inspired your poem compliment you, and quite another to have such well versed (pun intended) poets compliment you. Thank you, thank you!

Great wishes,
Poetaster D

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
6 posted 2000-06-06 08:27 PM


  I'm sinking in the Beautiful Blue of your words....A lovely weave of words!!! Thank you for sharing this!
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