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Toy Story |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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A toy lay on the shelf, forgotten, in The Land of Misbegotten. Cupie Doll, won at the fair-- Tilt--she blinks-- see vacant stare. (child's glory moment, all to see-- his chest a-puff in victory...) First nicks, then lust of crowded shelf-- doll's eye shut tears of rust... pained with stain of misplaced trust... Cupid's Love forgot herself. Tossed behind the prizes new, NEGLECT within the hush of dust-- window cracked-- breeze blew through-- TILT--she blinked a tear, renewed... The boy came home. Discerning eye, counting prizes of his Pride-- INVENTORY of Love's Lies... Had he but turned he would have spied Cupid's Doll, one eye blinked sly... and now she grins a bit too wide... |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Ah, this was so cool. Love the happy ending too. 'Tis true, I think - there's a happy ending out there for us all. Wonderful piece, serenity. Michael |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
yes, very cool...and full of perfect imagery and emotions. I love the way you often put the certain emotions and points in parenthesis... (love this poem) (and the sweet poet) (smile) take care, jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
serenity, very cool! I really like this one. There is magic in your words, too, dear!  ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Very wonderfully written ... takes me back to my youth and the magic of Hanns Christian Anderson ...thankyou Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
 and grinning a bit too wideI loved this Jeffrey |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Now this is good... "A toy lay on the shelf, forgotten, in The Land of Misbegotten." Having two houses for all the kids and an RV that's supposed for my wife and me... It's funny how those things get left laying around even in the RV. You wouldn't what to see the houses. *&$#&%#&*^ |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
had to come back and read this again Rex}>{{{{o> |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks to all- and thanks to Rex Allen-twice. Sincere Gratitude to All--thanx-- Serenity |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ I REALLY enjoyed this. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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The Celtic Sage New Member
since 2000-04-10
Posts 8 |
Very talented are you. This I like very much. TCS |
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