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Seek Not My Heart
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Seek Not My Heart |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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Seek Not My Heart Oh gentle winds 'neath moonlit skies, Do not you hear my heartfelt cries? Below the branches, here about, Do not you sense my fear and doubt? Side glistening rivers, sparkling streams, Do not you hear my woeful screams? Upon the meadows, touched with dew, Do not you see my hearts a'skew? Beneath the thousand twinkling stars, Do not you feel my jagged scars? Seek not my mournful heart kind breeze, For you'll not find it 'mongst these trees. It's scattered 'cross the moonlit skies, Accompanied by heartfelt sighs. It's drifting o're the gentle rain, A symbol of my silent pain. It's buried 'neath the meadow fair, Conjoined with all the sorrow there. It's lost among the stars this night, Too far to ease my quiet fright. No gentle winds, seek not my heart, For simply ... it has torn apart. /Kit McCallum |
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angelsamongus Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 70New York |
~Kit~ Your poem speaks to me. I know this all too well. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ It's scattered 'cross the moonlit skies, Accompanied by heartfelt sighs. It's drifting o're the gentle rain, A symbol of my silent pain. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Blessings~ Lori |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kit, This is a beautifully rendered piece, full of vivid images... Seek not my mournful heart kind breeze, For you'll not find it 'mongst these trees. ... No gentle winds, seek not my heart, For simply ... it has torn apart. --- Regards, sudhir. Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Lori: Thank you for the blessings ... ~Sudhir: Appreciated as always kind sir ... With much appreciation, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kit~ Simply the loveliest haunting render from a heart so tender. Enjoyed so much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this was simply lovely! Kathleen indy31_99@yahoo.com |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Beautifully haunting...last two lines a perfect end t o these lovely bittersweet images. Very nice poem! |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Kit; How heart rending, sad, and said with lyrical splendor. Ellie 02 |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Marge: Thank you for the kind words Marge ... tender but still, tormented sneaks out at times. ~Kathleen: Thank you for the kind words. ~Beki: It's strange how you can write poetry "backwards" sometimes ... the last two lines were what started me off ... thanks Beki. ~Ellie: What lovely comments, thank you so much Ellie. With much appreciation, /Kit |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Touchingly sad and lovely poem, Kit! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Touching and beautiful...my heart reaches out to you...may you feel Gods love and compassion and mercy. James |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh Kit, what talent you are blessed with upon reading these verses you write such expression is breath-taking.  Coco |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Love it! One of my favorites! Wonderful, Kit From your poetic twin Liz |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow! Kit this is wonderful! I read in your other post that you've written more in the few weeks that you've been here than in the months previously. If this is a sample.. write on!!! |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is absolutely wonderful... I'm sooooo glad you're here on the forums with us now...  |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Martie: Thanks so much Martie. ~James: Dear, sweet James, thank you. ~Coco: Thank you for the lovely response Coco. ~Liz: Thank you for the wonderful response, my poetic twin ... our paths have crossed yet again eh? I'll have to check my signature line  ~Poet deVine: I find such inspiration here Poet deVine ... everyone is so wonderful. Thank you for the encouragement. (Have I Thanked You Yet Today?) ~Nan: You'll be tired of me saying this Nan ... but thank you again. Had I not had such a warm response from you that first day, I fear I'd still be reading and writing from a'far. Thanks Nan. Warmest thanks and appreciation to all, /Kit |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh Kit,...I've read this now a couple of times and am sure I'll read it again. Wow,...it's really a wonderful piece of work...truly a delight to read. It's message and the text used flow in such a way that it's like liquid....I love it. *Peace. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
very very nice kit i enjoyed it to no end i did |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Kit, Absolutely lovely, absolutely. lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
I'm impressed! What an artistic expression! Painfully Beautful Kit Keep up the good work! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Kit, This one really hit home for me. You have summed up my feelings perfectly here. Very expressive and powerful writing. Always looking forward to reading more of your work. LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
....simply lovely.... You have captured it all. Marcy |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Spitfire: What a wonderful comment! Thank you Spitfire! ~Wayoutwalt: Glad you enjoyed it kind sir, kind sir! ~Lorraine: Thank you so much Lorraine! ~Irie: Thank you for the lovely comment Irie! ~LoneWolf: As I look forward to yours, thanks LoneWolf! ~Marcy: Thank you for the kind words Marcy! With much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Kit~ A very touching poem, it's imagery fantastic and very heartfelt. Luv Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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