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Lorraine Nisbet
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Jersey City, NJ USA

0 posted 2000-05-24 09:25 PM



I am sitting in my room
looking out the window pane,
I hear a slight tapping
I hadn't noticed it started to rain.
As I watch the raindrops
form into a daffodil,
then suddenly disappear
streaming down the sill.
I look again
to see if I can find,
something familiar
that will bring back to mind.
The days of springtime
bright sunshine and flowers
the warmer days
when we wiled away the hours.
Then I awoke
the daydream in demise,
it's not raining
but the teardrops falling from my eyes.  
  
                                                                    
    

[This message has been edited by Lorraine Nisbet (edited 05-25-2000).]

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netswan
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1 posted 2000-05-24 09:32 PM


Wonderful Poem - Lorraine - what great
imagery ----and what an ending -
achingly sweet.

Loved it!

~netswan

jwesley
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2 posted 2000-05-24 09:41 PM


Wishing and dreaming...are they not the same?

Very nice piece.  I enjoyed the journey.


jwesley

Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2000-05-24 10:01 PM


Lorraine~

I wish you daffodils to brighten your day and love to brighten your heart.
*HUGS*
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Lorraine Nisbet
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Jersey City, NJ USA
4 posted 2000-05-25 07:00 PM



netswan,

Thank you.  I loved your reply.

~Lorraine

jwesley,

Thank you much.

~Lorraine

Marge,

Thank you.  You are a sweet lady.

~Lorraine

Honeybee
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5 posted 2000-05-25 07:27 PM


~Lorraine~

Excellent flow, imagery and twist at the end!  A bittersweet piece to read, I relate all too well.  I only hope that soon that the "teardrops falling from your eyes" become tears of joy and peace.  This is the first poem that I have read by you and I am very impressed  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

Sven
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6 posted 2000-05-25 11:21 PM


Very touching and bittersweet. . . too often the rain becomes our tears. . . hope that yours do indeed become tears of joy. . .

Excellent poem. . .

----------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Lorraine Nisbet
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since 2000-05-18
Posts 218
Jersey City, NJ USA
7 posted 2000-05-26 07:45 PM



Melissa Honeybee,
Thank you for taking time to read. Sorry, you relate.

~Lorraine

Lorraine Nisbet
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since 2000-05-18
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Jersey City, NJ USA
8 posted 2000-05-26 07:48 PM



Melissa Honeybee,
Thank you for taking time to read. Sorry, you relate.

~Lorraine


Sven,
Thank you. Your too kind.

~Lorraine
          

          

[This message has been edited by Lorraine Nisbet (edited 05-26-2000).]

doreen peri
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9 posted 2000-05-26 11:28 PM


very real... very very real

you created a surreal feeling

thanks for the dream and the tears

Lorraine Nisbet
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since 2000-05-18
Posts 218
Jersey City, NJ USA
10 posted 2000-05-27 08:20 PM



doreen,

thank you much.

~Lorraine

 
A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur


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