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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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and so you look at me with no smile so I know you can't be joking and say you don't want a woman like me anymore and its all I can do to not laugh that it took you this long to to come to this realization for I think you never wanted me not the real me and so I wonder what I did this time that didn't meet up to the woman in your mind that I am not and have long since quit trying to be (except a few times for appearance's sake) and I know a smile here and now is inappropriate so I duck away from your dismissal of me with one hidden because I finally learned that its ok if you don't like me I do [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-19-2000).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corazon, LOL, enjoyed the read. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
The expression in this piece shows hurt and strength. Nice writing. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks sy  and danny yes....lots of hurt takes lots of strength to deal with it....am glad I have had enough so far, there have been times I didn't know if I could [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-19-2000).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This is sad yet written so well, I love the ending, it showed so much strength of character. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this Corazon...I was rejected by a woman I have know for nine months just recently but it was like I already knew we were not a match and I knew it was going to happen but I didn't know exactly when..so when it did happen I was already prepared and perhaps relieved. James |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Too many times, having someone not like us causes us to dislike ourselves, too. Liking ourselves in spite of what others feel is much harder and much more important because, once we reach that level, they can not hurt us any more. Love the writing.... |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Corazon -this is great! I love it. Well, said! netswan |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Excellente'! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corazon~ This is excellent writing, my lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Strong poem and the last lines...perfect!! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all....and I will say thank you again for part of the ending is due to you....I have found myself and learned to like myself through my poetry....you guys and your kind responses encourage me to continue my quest |
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The Celtic Sage New Member
since 2000-04-10
Posts 8 |
Brilliant ending, the way it should be. TCS |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Fabulous! I loved it. Very well done. David2 |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I think I'll ditto Bal , K., and add Expressed with excellence ... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like you, too. *S* (Even when I'm jealous of your great writing! *G*) |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Glad to see you coming to your senses...G* Those last lines kickes some major poetic butt!!! he he And I not only LIKE you...I love ya girl...so THERE!!  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is great, Corazon and I especially love the ending! Denise |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
ok, I hate taking this back to page 1 when it is ready for bed....but had to give everyone great big hugs and say thank you....I love you too *s* |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
had to add my say...hmmm i always show up too late..when everyone is heading off to bed...but this gave me a smile..and a feling of sadness too..his loss!! and a great poem..our win "Love is the only drug you can take that will convince you each time that you've never had it before." ~author unknown~ |
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sweetchild Junior Member
since 2000-04-19
Posts 37 |
Loved it! Great job! |
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