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My heart forgive me the affliction... (for Marge)
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My heart forgive me the affliction... (for Marge) |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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*note: there's an explanation of the names below the poem. My heart, forgive me the affliction The love you feel I can’t resist I think I found my vocation This time it’s real I have a gist And I will stand by this conviction I’ve met my mentors with ovation The gifts of Mnemosyne and Zeus, Nine sisters. Each will be my muse And I will write with inspiration, And with my verses I’ll amuse, I’ll stun, bewilder and amaze. The critics will not get enough Of words of Thalia, my love. I’ll travel back through time and space And lead my readers to the past With Clio’s words I’ll flabbergast And with perceiving eyes I’ll gaze And write about years that passed And resurrect them for the crowd. I’ll take my reader from the ground, Enlivened greatly from afar, High into space to reach the star And there he’ll live forevermore Urania, I’ve grown unbound! There is no height that I can’t capture! I’ll tango high above the floor And praise the holy Terpsichore For winding me to feel the rapture. And Euterpe with her golden strings Will play for me in exaltation. Polymnia will wake the nation To listen to a soul that sings! Oh Calliope, let’s hear a tale The youth is hungry for you word Half-drowsing and quite bored The youth is tired of the stale. It needs a hero to acclaim Oh Calliope, don’t let me fail, Don’t let a writer sink in shame. And for the wisemen, Melpomene, Create someone they haven’t seen His sorrow let them sympathize And curse his destiny with spleen. Erato, help my soul arise! I’m gathering the information My love’s effect to aggrandize And to extend my love’s sensation. To saturate with inspiration My broken heart, my blind eyes. Explanation: *Calliope the muse of heroic poetry. *Clio the muse of history. *Erato being the muse of love poetry. *Euterpe being the muse of music and lyric poetry. *Melpomene being the muse of tragedy. *Polyhymnia (or Polymnia) being the muse of sublime hymns or sacred songs. *Terpsichore was the muse of dancing and choral song. *Thalia the muse of comedy and idyillic poetry. *Urania is the muse of astronomy and spiritual love. [This message has been edited by Master (edited 05-07-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Master~ I am delighted.  You did the musing sisters proud. What a treat to be inspired by them all at once. They are fascinating for sure. I believe we've only come to know their powers so that we can reach new heights in our writing. You are more than welcome for the information pertaining to them. I've always known the history of the muses and I honestly believe that in knowing them, it frees them to come more often. A WONDERFUL, WONDERFUL piece. I think you captured them all in their beauty. Thank you for sharing this with us. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
I was inspired by your knowledge, so you can say that you're my muse... LOL Thanks! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WOW....I've only just caught up to this one and I'm glad I found it you have done yourself proud and I applaud you. I think Marge is such a wonderful poet and person and I think you,ve done her proud too.Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you Tracie! Glad you liked it! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
As much as I love your masterful translations I love your original poetry even more! This is excellent, Master! Denise |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you Denise, any advice on how I can make this one better? Should I try to continue with it or leave it as it is? |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I'm no critic, that's for sure, but I know when I love something and I love this just the way it is. If you are brave of heart try posting it in CA for some in-depth if you want to see where it stands with those sweethearts over there (and they really are). To me it seems perfect just as it is though! Thanks for asking for my opinion! Denise |
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