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Spring Haiku |
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Sunshine
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Spring Haiku Heartstrings, heart songs, sing Messages of love they bring Sing heart, heart song, Spring 18 April, 2000 ©KRJ Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ This is wonderful. You go girl ! You're hooked !  ~*Marge*~ (aren't we working hard?) ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marge Hooked am I to pen paper, computer, where, when Flourish forth, dreams spin. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Smiling here, Sun ....... |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This is very refreshing! Nathan |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Thank you Pepper... Refreshing is as refreshing does, Nate! Thanks... |
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rojogrande Junior Member
since 2000-04-10
Posts 29Fullerton, CA, USA |
Nice thought, but I believe that haikus are supposed to be about nature, not feelings or emotions. Also, do not force rhyme, let your poetry fit the form of the poem. Spring=renewal=freeflowing. Do not get me wrong, I really did like the poem, but please do not force yourself into the constraints of this type of poem. I firmly believe that one should write to fit themselves, and just let the pen (or in this case, the keyboard) just recieve the emotions and let them flow to the paper (or to the screen). |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sunshine~ Your pen fits paper Quite nicely if I do say All work leaves no play You send your best thoughts The way you want them to be Unique poetry You write and I read Much delight for both of us Haiku means no fuss Let mind flow in ink Penning whatever YOU think Me like you Haiku ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, You go girl, I enjoy your work. *L* |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
rojogrande, thank you for your input... Marge Japanese you sound spreading advice up and down solid, solid, sound [LOL here...] Sy, I always look forward to your comments, thank you... |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i like the way you play around with the words...delightful!! ")  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Thank you, Kaile! |
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