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Ghosts of Shiloh
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Ghosts of Shiloh |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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Ghosts of Shiloh Specter of dust and blood orchards where that house of peace estranged this grandfather from that one life flows by muddy as the Tennessee River bearing trespassers traitor to its homeland namesake kin that water thickened with blood A quarrel with lines drawn tight across honeycomb fenced neighbors feuding over colors black white, blue gray red blood bled the pond the fields of freedom to some they buried the bodies seeds of perennial strife Weeds to a flag flown of spite; to Bloods or Crips colors coloured words rage in the wake of Shiloh's ghosts the folly of spilled blood that war's only victor is in the end odium propagated progeny colored with bigotry Through silver maple leaves blowing into black sky cannons' shadows graze the grass stained mist of rage in Aprils pastel wraith so we may remember always that which we should forget Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very powerful writing, LR. Well done! Denise |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Wow ---- this is very good. And, of course, sad ----( I write fiction novels of the civil war era and have done much studying of the history of that time Well portrayed. netswan |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Superb, powerful images employed here, Local Rebel... "seeds of perennial strife" (loved this in particular...such truth here) "cannons' shadows graze the grass stained mist of rage" That which we should forget...and you've reminded the reader just that. Wonderful writing. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Hi LR, You have a talent for bringing life to your words. This was an excellent example of that. Touching read...very nice job, LR. warmhrt the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is excellent and powerful writing! |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thanks.... been kinda busy of late with stuff and haven't really written... first feeble attempt here... Wish I had time to stay and read all your fine works... but alas ... I shant be back until thursday at best... TTFN |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
great writing...and yep will have to ditto "powerful" that describes it perfectly....and the ending...that was perfect too  |
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pandora Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 184 |
you're a pretty darned good poet, y'know? vivid, descriptive, emotive, and carrying a message of weight.... loved it!~  pan |
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