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Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

0 posted 2002-01-17 09:58 PM

Light winds of destiny
I'm down on bended knee
and I am holding onto almost
nothing now but me.
But even in the wind
that drifts along the bay
and through the twlight glistening
there's so much left to say.

There! Look beyond the shore
and past the waves that roar
I think, yes I believe that I am
stronger than before.
But I've a ways to go
for I believe that fate
is chance that's cloaked in mystery
it's joy, I celebrate.

I celebrate the time
that's given to us all
because no man is guaranteed
another day, another eve
lights winds of destiny
I'm down on both my knees.

I'm holding onto everything
but nothing do I see.
I feel a presence near
a spirit, maybe so
but all I know is someone loves me,
will not let me go.

I write until I drop
and then I'll slowly rise
before the morning sun approaches
I will dry my eyes.
New visions will I see
more beautiful to me
for all the things I just imagined
I will write as real.

Oh winds of destiny
I thank you for the time
that I have spent in humble thought
and for the gift of rhyme.

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

BloomingRose
Member Elite

since 2000-08-09

Posts 3092
Florida

1 posted 2002-01-18 09:58 AM

Oh winds of destiny
I thank you for the time
that I have spent in humble thought
and for the gift of rhyme.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I think the presence that you know is near, has given you the gift of ryhme...and time.
Love knows no boundries of time and will wait forever, so hold fast to that unseen hand.
I believe your tomorrows are waiting with a smile.

Hugs,
Deb

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2002-01-18 10:18 AM

This poem is lovely in thought and full of rhythm. Nice to read. Joyce

pegasus111
Member Elite

since 2000-07-27

Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa

3 posted 2002-01-18 01:29 PM

I love this but there are 2 lines that trouble me:

for all the things I just imagined
I will write as real

maybe it's just me.. the rest is as smooth as teflon..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2002-01-18 01:54 PM

thanks all,

yes, those lines bothered me too, this is
one I would like to rewrite and probably will.
The flow kind of lost something somewhere
but I'm extremely exhausted and shouldn't
even be writing anything right now. And I'm not!
ha ha, just trying to recover.

Thank you guys

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

5 posted 2002-01-18 08:33 PM

Irish Rose: I really like this poem and the title is wonderful.

Betty Lou Hebert

2dalimit
Member Elite

since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

6 posted 2002-01-19 05:21 AM

The title is intriguing. I enjoy your gift of rhyme. Write on.

Melton

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