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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind 
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Out in the Sea Dinging, dinging, dinging... Raining drops Accompany by wind as Piano sounds, echoing My pot of thoughts. Suddenly, I am surrounded in the mist. My eyes are dazed with confusion, Wondering... Perhaps I have been Too harsh to myself. Every time I was to say "Girl, you're pretty." To my mirror, I hesitated Cause I couldn't face the girl in me. I was a young girl with a pretty heart, Yet when I was in childhood I never knew I was Lovable. Cause all the time I thought, A little bullying among siblings Was a bad bad thing, While it in fact it is a common thing, A process for children to learn To be Co-operative, and caring. Now I am a woman, Yet I made the same mistake That I did in childhood. I have this ideal woman Image stick to my face, That I That I overlook my attributes Which exist in me. No matter who compliment me, I feel I feel I'm more corrupted with Time passing by. Innocent once was there, Now is fading Fading away... And more bad habits Developed As I learn about the world. Once I was never jealous, I was forever patient, Now it seems like I'm losing All those good things inside me. And I, I can't help but be sad, Feeling Shore is so far away. And waves are Too high for me to breathe. I'm drowning... Yet just I was to out of breath, A familiar face looks down. His voice seems like my pastor's And it seems like the voice of my friends, Then I know This is my Father's voice. He reminds me We are born perfect. He made each one With unique, special plans. That our goodness Is inborn in us- Never could be taken away. Thank you Lord for your words. I will try to rediscover The child in me, And stay forever young In my heart. (c)June 10, 2003 Eliza Simmons Eliza Simmons ~Every girl has a dream within. ~Yesterday insult, today gain. [This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (06-11-2003 07:44 PM).] |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
You have expressed your feelings well Eliza. I enjoyed this. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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idleeyes86 Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 64Somewhere over the rainbow |
I certainly know a few people who will empathise with this. I admire the way you are completely honest here, yet you don't start going into self-pity, you just say what you feel. And you leave the reader on a hopeful note. |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Dear Eliza, i understand ur expression, and i like this hopeful poem so much Love Michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Eliza~ You are a reflective poetess~ Insightful piece of penning here~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Eliza: I enjoyed this poem. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Marge used the right words. Reflective and I hope you are understanding of your own faults as much as you are of others. God didn't make junk. Love Joyce |
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