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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2003-05-02 09:04 AM


Invisible Tears

Waiting so long
...to return home,
When I finally did
...I walked to this park
Of memories of who
... have fought with me
Against the giant monster
...of war- the heat of guns and bombs
Flying and exploding to our faces.

Thousand had told me
...that the war was over.
But deep in my heart
... my coldness stayed.
I still heard voices
... playing back to me
The scream and pain I saw
... were too much to bear.

I couldn't sleep at night,
...for sorrow filled within.
I cried everyday without anyone knew
... my invisible tears.
The tears that I had
... couldn't clean thousand blood I slayed.
The thousand scars I had,
...couldn't heal by time.

And a thousand years went by,
Who would remember each soldier
Who once had fought so hard
With their life forever changed.
And a thousand years went by,
And soon all would forget,
What war brought us-
Endless unspoken sorrows.

(c)May 2, 2003
Eliza Simmons

Side note: Please excuse my childish attempt to write a war poem. In reality I don't know much about war. None of my immediately family members were soldiers. But I hope you won't mind reading this poem.

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.


[This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (05-02-2003 09:07 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-05-02 12:38 PM


Eliza~
Oh ... don't you apologize for ANYTHING~
Your beautifully sensitive poem cried the tears of many~

Thank you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Joyce Johnson
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2 posted 2003-05-02 04:01 PM


Good job.  A sensitive soul like yours does not have to have personally suffered.  Love, Joyce
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3 posted 2003-05-02 07:25 PM


Eliza:  Never apologize for writing about something you have not personally experienced. That is what sensitivity and imagination are all about!  Very touching poem.

Betty Lou Hebert

midnightblues
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4 posted 2003-05-03 11:58 AM


Dear Eliza,

I LOVE THIS I LOVE THIS!!!!

esp this:

And a thousand years went by,
Who would remember each soldier
Who once had fought so hard
With their life forever changed.
And a thousand years went by,
And soon all would forget,
What war brought us-
Endless unspoken sorrows

Love
Michelle

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

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