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Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

0 posted 2003-04-02 10:22 AM

Reading
Through the letters
And the briliant answers
I discover rictameters.
Longing to try this exciting new form
I knock on firmly closed door
Not gaining admittance.
I continue
Reading.

[This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (04-02-2003 11:06 AM).]

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2003-04-02 10:34 AM

Hi sweet lady~

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~Lady
Such soft phrases
Drip from ink in the well
Swelling with each stroke in penning
Falls on parchmented paper for all time
Grabbing hearts in poetic rhyme
All this, and maybe more
Poetic pour
Lady~

*I LOVE this format ... and they are a challenge~
Thank you for the inspiration~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2003-04-02 11:09 AM

Glad I inspired you. I am grappling with the form, will try to be more poetic next time. Hope you go back to read my corrected version. Love, Joyce

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

3 posted 2003-04-02 11:10 AM

both of you done way better than my attempt! sometimes ago, I try this format b4...it was fun.

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2003-04-02 12:14 PM

Hey there, Joyce~
If you knocked on the poetry workshop door~
Just hang loose ... teacher sometimes is on the playground !

Read corrected version-

Reading (2)
Through the letters (4)
And the briliant answers (brilliant) (6)
I discover rictameters. (8)
Longing to try this exciting new form (10)
I knock on firmly closed door(7)
(I knock firmly on the closed door) (8)
Not gaining admittance. (6)
I continue (4)
Reading.(2)

Minor corrections = perfectamundo !
Sometimes Teacher lets me help grade papers~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

5 posted 2003-04-02 12:24 PM

Thanks. Funny I counted carefully. Oh, oh i checked my original and I left out (the) when posting.Please check my new one. Love, Joyce

[This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (04-02-2003 12:25 PM).]

BSC

Moderator

Member Elite

since 2000-02-04

Posts 2919
New York, USA

6 posted 2003-04-04 08:45 AM

Niiiice Joyce ~ I am duly impressed ~ great job! Bonnie

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

7 posted 2003-04-04 02:38 PM

Joyce: You have bravely gone where few have gone before, including me!

Betty Lou Hebert

Flower
Member

since 2003-03-15

Posts 240
California

8 posted 2003-04-05 03:41 PM

Gee! IMPRESSIVE.

Love reading all these great writes.
I write not!

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