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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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This took form years back, and I kept adding lines, and removing lines...did not know what I was writing...and I still do not have a title... Initially I did not want this to be displayed at all...consists fragments of shattered emotions. Today mustering all my courage, I am doing so...I do not take any pride in doing this though... but felt that since this place has given so much to me, I should share my feelings as much as I can... But it is true, I still love her... as much as I had the first time... That cannot be tainted by any happening, I think...and no, I can't even forget her... ok, too much blah-blah... I leave this to your better judgement... --------- One rare look is all it had taken, To drive me into a purple haze, A single moment is all it needed, Transfixed me into endless gaze. Smoky brown, your big bright eyes, Beautiful angel, you were all right, And without uttering a single word, I Stared, you were the only one in sight. You knew the love in my eyes, You knew all I cared for was you, You knew, for you I would die, You knew it all, you always knew. You took me for a ride, destroyed my pride, Your pet dog, I'd become, a slave, a rooster For your love, a clown, your personal jester, And then you said, "Move on, just let me be!" You said, you never wanted to get involved, You wanted to be clever, learned and evolved. I tried to be a good soul, let you be, Though in all my throbbing heart, I still loved you whole, as to me, You were always a work of art. Six months later, another sad day, I met you as you crossed my way, In your arms, I saw my best friend, And you smiled - wicked like a fiend. A mocking smile, reminded me what a fool I had been, My life's boat rocked as darkness filled the scene. To this very day, I still love you, I really do Even with the hurt you gave me as love's tearful present, On a gloomy darkened sky, with its hollow starry lights, I dream of holding your hands, with the moon crescent. - Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This piece makes me sad for you and I cannot even imagine the ache in your depths. I must say you are a master over words as all of yours I have read are absolute wonders. Love should not be this way. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Perhaps like myself you will find that with each outpouring of these pent up emotions, the soul is cleansed of what haunts it a little bit more. Time. Both enemy and friend. Meanwhile the torture lends itself to the creative process. Keep creating these gems and soon enough you will be free. jamie< !signature--> ps perhaps in a few years you will look back and question the verity of today's truths. Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". [This message has been edited by Prometheus (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
sometimes untitled is a title....it suits this, as it needs no more description, your heart aches....sad but very good writing |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah my companion and soul-scarred friend, from what depths you have penned your emotions and tears, your sorrows and fears, believe me, I can comprehend. Would that I have a wand in hand would that I were yours to command, would that I end all your fears, would that I could dry your tears a wave of the wand her memory to ban. Take a breath, breathe slow and deep and travel into tranquil Morpheus’ sleep, so that I may inhabit your dreams to warm you in sunlight, guide you with moonbeam. Now in these dreams your future appears gallant man, man of cheer, hold this hand, forever yours, take this heart, be assured that from a dream I will appear… to be your reality, your dream, sincere... see, my friend, you did it, again... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Sudhir, wow...A powerful piece my friend one of raw emotions.Thank you for sharing. I hope that expressing your emotions has helped to soothe the pain. take care. "but for the lovers, their arms Round the griefs of the ages, Who pay no praise or wages Nor heed my craft or art" Dylan Thomas. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Mark, Your words offer me much solace...Thanks Jamie, perhaps...just perhaps... Thanks for your kind words Corazon, Thanks a million for your heart-felt words Karilea, How often do I think: have I thanked you enough??? have I? Brian, Many thanks...its a pity, thats all I can say ... Thanks a lot everybody, Many regards, Sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sudhir, you make me smile with your lovely works of written word...if I make you smile in return, than that indeed, is thanks enough... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Thank you for sharing this.....it remidns me of a recent happening in my life....without saying too much it was painful to read....thank you again...it is a wonderful piece...... Julie :) |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
JulieAnn, Thanks a lot for your response and for reading this piece... regards, sudhir |
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