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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA 
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Sweet scent engaging tranquilizing me drawing me in closer to her soul. She whirls and twirls above me captivating spellbinding gliding through my world like an angel on wings of silk. She leans forward pressing toward me eyeing me seeing behind the mask that I wear around her. She whispers in my ear... "Thank you" as I tuck a dollar bill into her thong.... Christopher M. Grimm |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Well, now, that wasn't QUITE the ending I was expecting. Liked the line about her scent drawing you closer to her soul. Elizabeth< !signature--> I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! [This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 06-22-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
what ever get us thru the nite...right Chris  cool poem... liked the way you express your awe for her... and the truth of the 3rd stanza..very cool later jm |
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notlikely2 Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 308UK |
WoW! So powerful with so few words.... I like this one....and so very revealing..... Love is like the measles.....the older you are, the harder it hits you! |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
LOL...well Elizabeth..sometimes life doesn't always go the way we expect it...lol. and thanks JM and notlikely....you know I appreciated the comments. chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
LMAO Chris! oh Men! Well written, not the ending that I had expected, but that's what makes it all the more hilarious. Is this a poem written from experience, I wonder Hey, whatever turns your crank, at least it led you to write this funny piece! Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Chris...I LOVE IT!! But Sir, I seem to sense a trend in several of your poems |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
ROFL!!!! i love this! hehe  |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Such a sentimental and romantic beginning Christopher ... but what a great punchline at the end ... loved it!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Good writing, Chris...you left so little (and so much!) to the imagination. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
LOL...sorry Ruth but Ive begun to notice that too.... probably stemming from spending WAY too much time at a place downtown called TRIXIes......lol...(local joke) anyway, I thanks you all for your comments... chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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