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My World In Your Eyes
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My World In Your Eyes |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Girl it's six in the morning, daybreak dawning and deep down but not destroyed I'm a shadow of a love you knew inside a ring of fire and youth on a river of dreams passing through. Goodnight Mr Moon somewhere I used to be I see you smiling at me. Good morning Mr Day I know it's time again to be on my way with my world in your eyes I just can't stay. Girl it's about where we've been, talking chin to chin and all the things that matter are in the love and truth we knew inside a ring of fire and youth on a river of dreams passing through. Goodnight Mr. Love somewhere I used to be keeps you inside of me. Good morning Mr. Day I know it's time again to be on my way with my world in your eyes I just can't stay. Celtrue2000@E3B1G9 |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Great poem, I enjoyed this very much! Very heart felt. "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ I like this. What a great line this is - 'I'm a shadow of a love you knew' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I liked it a lot too.Nice poem  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) The "chin to chin" line drew such a vivid picture...great line! A heart touching poem all the way through. Thank you for sharing this~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Goodnight Mr. Love somewhere I used to be keeps you inside of me. ------------ perfect ethome... absolutely lyrically & emotionally perfect. jm |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
ethome, Superb poem. Comes from the heart...the best writing there is. LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Mr. romantic, loved your tale, and the sweetness it carried, goodnight moon...etc. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks so much Dawn Eclipse, Marge, Vandana, Butterflies_don't_cry, Janet Marie, Lone Wolf, and last but certainly not least, A Romantic Heart. I appreciate your input so much thanks all. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Great poem. especially liked the " I'm a shadow of a love you knew inside a ring of fire and youth". keep it up and I will be looking forward to more of these. If you get the time I would like your response to one I posted yesterday entitled "Through Your Eyes". It is a new style for me and I think you can give me some honest insight on this one. Thanks |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I heard the music in this one, Ethome! Oh, very, very good! Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Mark and Sunshine I really appreciate you stopping in to havw a read.. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Ethome! So sweet, tender and romantic, just lovely! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
lyrical, balladic (if thats an allowed word) and very much an emotional piece this... enjoyed it I'm a shadow of a love you knew inside a ring of fire and youth on a river of dreams passing through. great lines here... ethome, my regards, Sudhir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Sudhir and Kit for your fine comments. Very much appreciated..... |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
"With my world in your eyes, I just can't stay" I love that line, speaks volumes to me wonderful work I enjoyed it. Olias |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
very good poem....liked it alot and yes I have to agree very vivid imagry!! Great peice!  Julie :) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Julie Ann and Olias I appreciate your comments so much. |
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