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One Last Look At Goodbye...my 500th post
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One Last Look At Goodbye...my 500th post |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
She sits at the waters edge. Like a mystic mermaid from fantasies past Her eyes the colour of storm tossed seas Her hair sun kissed sand. And he watches. Her siren song floats out across the water Soft and lilting Haunting in its sadness Luring him with its tenderness and pain. And he draws nearer. She walks the waters edge Unaware of his presense Her lonliness like a wall between them Her pain a shield he cannot penetrate. And he cries. She gazes out across the water Tears like sea spray on her face Waves of longing grip her heart And unaware she moves into the deep. And he whispers to her. Step by step she answers the call That loneliness has sent her Not hearing his voice for the echoes in her mind And the waves washing over her body. And he stumbles. Sea mingles with tears as she searches the horizon Searching searching for the lost love she treasures Sinking ever deeper into this watery pain Falling into the abyss of forget. And he drops to his knees. One last glimse behind one last look at goodbye Then she is gone And he has lost. < !signature--> never say never [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 07-24-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Warning label needed. Please bring Kleenex before entering. This is so sad. Great creation and congrats on your 500th!!  |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
What a thought provoking poem. Excellent!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow! Congratulations on your 500th Paula! What a hauntingly mystical verse to celebrate this milestone with ... wonderful!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
my, my ... you do love water ... this is a wonderful piece, Paula ... enjoyed the read very much ... it's a watery day at Passions |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Paula..CONGRATS ON YOUR 500th!! This is a very sad fairy tale type of story that is so well written with mystic emotion. I enjoyed it very much and I am voting. I think it is very worthy of the book. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Beautiful Paula..and congratulations on your 500th.. ~~softsmiles M |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Paula, the short time I have been here, I find this one to be your best~ so creative. I loved it. Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Mark...thank you and thanks for the encouragement Xeonox...I'm always glad when what I write makes someone think...thanks Kit...thank you it was a milestone more me MA...lol I TOLD you I like water...thank you ethome...thank you my friend coming from you this is high praise indeed MMoonchild...thank you Saunni...I am glad you like it it didnt come easy never say never |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is great, Paula...so tense in the building...like a story poem...mystical and magical and romantic..well done! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Martie...thank you thats what I was hoping for never say never |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Paula.... I thought beings I was running into you on every poem tonight, that I would come straight here, and say 'howdy'! I'm glad I did....this is a beautifully written story, girl!!! I am SUCH a fan of your work.......... I love this one!!!!!! Love received is equal to love given! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful Paula!!! This was simply wonderful. . . a grand way to mark your 500th. . . excellent!!! ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Zion Junior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 33Melbourne Australia |
puts my efforts to shame congrats for the 500 |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ Enjoyed the dramatic mystic ! Congratulations on the 500th ... piece of cake from here on ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
OMG Paula this absolutely scary the way you put this together is perfectly devine  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
excellent weave you have penned here Paula add my congrats to the parade you got to this milestone in a short amount of time... consider your self officially addicted  jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Outstanding! I was deeply touched by this very flowing, very well crafted poem!!! Bravo! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sunny1...I know I can always count on you to say omething wonderful, and just make my day. Sven...thanks for taking the time to read this...I do value you and your talent. Zion...NO NO NO you write beautifully and you cannot compare you to me. Marge...LOL a piece of cake huh? I hope so Jeffrey...coming from you that means so much thanks guy never say never |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
JM...thanks I got here fast with the encouragement of a friend Toddles...thank you and I do enjoy your work. never say never |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
thanks for the good cry...I loved this! It's a great one for your 500th...keep on going! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Passing Shadows...somedays we all need a good cry...thanks. never say never |
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Zion Junior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 33Melbourne Australia |
very immpressive poem i enjoyed it enough to read it again |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Zion higher praise I coudnt ask for than to have you read this twice...thank you my friend never say never |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 sad |
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