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The red rose |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Lately, I've been working on writing pretty poems because, I realize that how well you can write a pretty poem also tells how good of a poet you are. Plus, if I was to publish a book, I want to have a variety of poems in my book so that's it well-rounded. Enjoy! It stood in the middle, of a mystic garden. It green stems spoke riddles, as its brown thorns hardened. The red rose's presence called, in the beauty of its place. It's petals formed a wall, as the sun shined with grace. In it's own little heart, is where the red roses rests. In the moment of art, sits the tender red crest. The red rose stood very calm, as the wind blew astray. In the heart of my palm, is where the red rose lay. Nathan |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Hi Nate, I don't know if I agree that how well you can write a pretty poem tells how good a poet you are. I think regardless of what mood the poem is a good poem is one that connects with poem and after reading it they feel something different that they did not have before reading the poem. Though I do agree that you should try nad very your themes and styles, explore and experiment. anyway that is my two pences worth on that on to the poem, which I really enjoyed. You have some beautiful images. of a mystic garden. It green stems spoke riddles, as its brown thorns hardened. The red rose's presence called, in the beauty of its place. It's petals formed a wall, as the sun shined with grace. and paint a lovely vivid picture. beautiful. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Piccaso "You do not destroy an idea by killing people; you replace it with a better one". Edward Keating Pablo Picasso ----- |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Hey Nate! I have to agree with Brian on this. MHO is that poems are like any other art form. They come in many different styles, but only two real kinds. Good, or...well, not as good.  This was a very good foray into something different for you and you seemed to handle it very well. I definitely agree that a truly diverse poet is something to regard. Working towards that end is commendable. Keep writing works such as this and the book shall be well rounded indeed! Best of luck, and thanks for a great poem. Trew. I have been to see the world. Tasted life at every turn. And all the time your face came back to haunt me. -Chris DeBurgh |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
and yep, think you got some disagreement on that one, to me a poet is one who can make you see or feel what he wants you to see...whether it be pretty or not, it is guaged on how effective it is...this is pretty....so you effectively wrote a pretty poem  |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh pretty, pretty indeed. Lovely poem. Images painted in my mind so well. Take care. *Peace. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nate~ Sweetheart, if you were trying for 'pretty' ... you sure made it ! This has a gentle beauty about it that is alive with the imagery of loveliness. You wrote your way into 'pretty' with this one. Good job, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is very pretty Nate, a wonderful poem with beautiful images |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nate this poem is soft and simply beautiful. James |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you brian madden for your thoughts and your lenghty post. Thank you Trew for your great post. Thank you corazon for your nice comments. Thank you Spitfire, for your wonderful posts. Thank you Marge, for your wonderful comments. Thank you whiskey, for your wonderful commments. Thank you James, for your nice comments. Nathan |
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*passion-fruit* Junior Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 12 |
Nate Dogg, this is my first time on Passions and I really love your poem. It's very beautiful!!! I can't wait to read more of your work. Good luck!!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well you certainly did write a very pretty poem. You have a point about that kind of expression, it's in a world of it's own. Very very nicely done! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is very pretty, Nate! Denise |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you Passio, Denise, and ethome for your beautiful comments. Nathan |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Nate~ this is great, very pretty! I really liked it. -SEA |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you Sea, I 'm glad that you liked it! Nathan |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) Nave* I agree with you, "pretty" is not one of my strong suits so I know how much of a challenge it can be. You missed pretty though and went straight to beautiful, the imagery you used so graceful. Thank you for sharing this~ |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I agree it is lovely, perfection! |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you Butterfly for that beautiful post and thank you Romantic heart for that lovely post. Nathan |
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