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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Distances Ribbons of rivers and valleys of green Black curving highways and mountains between Wetlands and acres of farmland and field Desolate canyons and cities of steel Shorelines and inlets and crystalline bays Verdant hills coated with bluegrass to graze Beaches and forests and jagged terrain Storm clouds and blizzards, and wind gusts and rain Tidal waves, undertows, sounds of the sea Walls of division between you and me All of these elements keep us apart But you couldn’t be closer than here in my heart Your arms are my blanket, your lips are my wine Your eyes are the jewels my desires enshrine Though distance and forces of nature divide Your love in my heart will forever abide Elizabeth Santos 7/8/00 |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh my goodness Elizabeth ... just breath-takingly beautiful! The flow is simply superb, and the imagery is stunning! Much loved this I did!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Liz, With words like these, it makes me more and more disbelieve that you seriously started writing poetry just a year back... "Your eyes are the jewels my desires enshrine" What a lovely thought... regards, sudhir |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Liz The words flow from your pen so well. You make me pause and wonder whether I should resort to plagiarism, lol. This poem is so sweet, and so smooth. I hope the rivers and mountains between you and your love become much fewer. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
This is really beautiful, Elizabeth........ You painted such a peaceful picture with your thoughts....... I'm glad you shared them...... |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
A really beautiful poem..Thankyou for the experience to read this.. Beth |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Liz, I just sit here shaking my head at the total beauty you poses in your soul, it leaves me speachless, Love always, Cerenity |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You've woven a beautiful blanket of love Liz, This is fantastic~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--a beautiful, flawlessly done piece. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
How very beautiful, Elizabeth! Corinne |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Liz, this is a beautiful piece. I love the flow you've achieved with this poem, you have great talent! (As you already know! )"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
quote: Those comparisons are so nice-as is the whole poem! Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, If I were he And you were she This would be my answer to Your epopee. The distance There is a gap on my map Two inches or three And I stare and I stare As it lies on my knee. An ant could walk it in A moments blind run. But he does no know The journey begun. For between each point Lies an ocean of fare More then trees and valleys Then the paper declares. It boggles my mind The symbols impart. The two or three inches Goes straight through my heart. I would if I could Fly the distance a start But my only resort, Lies here in my art. May angels surround you With grace and with care. Hold you and keep you Till I can get there. Love Sy |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful flowing lines. Excellent rythum and rhyme. Very well done as usual! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Kit, Thank you for your beautiful remarks Sudhir, yes, I started writing a year ago and before that couldn't compose a decent letter. But thanks for your comments Lng Jhn, Don't worry, you don't need to copy anything. I often think of the wonderful poem you wrote to Lorelie, it was just exquisite. Take care Sunny, Beth, Cerenity and Butterflies, I believe you are all romantics, and I'm so glad you likes this poem. Martie, I like your critique (no bias here) Corinne, Thank you LOvebug, Another upcoming romantic, I think. Keep up your good work Elizabeth Your words mean so much Sy, You may be right, if you look on a map An ant walks round the world while your taking a nap He climbs the Himilayas into Nepal In 4 seconds ,that is,if he doesn't fall (ouch!) A simple housefly, on the other hand Has the entire world at his command Flying from port to port to port No valid ID or even passport Now if I used a map to decifer the risk The poem above wouldn't even exist Thanks for your very clever poem Ethome, Thank you for the very warm compliments Liz |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Lovely, Liz. Simply lovely. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Liz a truely beautiful sleep, one that will insure that I am kept safely in the arms of sleep dreaming of the images of your poem. I shall sleep in the serenity of your words. "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
This is awesome Liz!! Such beautiful images. Wonderful writing!! I just have to say I love the end . . . perfect. LW Poetry should surprise by a fine excess and not by singularity - it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts, and appear almo |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Doreen, Thank you so much Brian, If you are far from her, you may rest in the serenity of these words. They are for you Thank you Lone wolf. Coming from you, a very warming compliment. Thank you Liz |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Absolutely beautiful, Elizabeth! Denise |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Wow, such powerful feelings woven for all to see. I enjoyed very much. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Denise, Thank you, dear Gemini, THank you for the comments. glad you liked it Liz |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Breath-takingly beautiful, Liz!!! This one is going straight in to my library for future reading and pleasure. What a wonderful piece of work....once again!! Your soul is a river of beauty never to run dry splashing the page with pure beauty. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
.... help where do I start ..... Your poetry is truly amazing it is unbelievable that anyone could actualy be that good, I loved this poem equaly as much as the last and the one before and the one before, you just keep on doing the impossible . loved it . L.of.L. Tom . Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Lizzie, Always so sweet a reply. Thank you for always reading and responding Liz Tom Thank you for your very generous response to this poem. I appreciate your remarks Liz |
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