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Lurdburger
Junior Member

since 2000-08-05

Posts 39
Carlisle, Cumbria, England

0 posted 2000-08-05 02:29 PM

One Or The Other

The power of suggestion
Reigns supreme over a disorganised,
And ultimately teenage mind.

I knew I loved her.
I knew I missed her.

She says "Do you want me or just a partner?"
And I curse the part of me that says
"She's got a point."

So here I am,
Tortured by wonder,
Sentenced by my own doubt.

Too young to make sense of what I feel
When I feel the pain of being too young.

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

1 posted 2000-08-05 02:46 PM

I loved your poem it was totally awsome keep up the great work!
Lauren

GodsPerfktAngel
Junior Member

since 2000-08-05

Posts 28
Ohio

2 posted 2000-08-05 03:46 PM

I can tell you are WWAAAYY mature.Well good first post and keep up hte good work!!!

Lurdburger
Junior Member

since 2000-08-05

Posts 39
Carlisle, Cumbria, England

3 posted 2000-08-05 04:48 PM

Thanx Lauren, Angel, I appreciate your comments

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

4 posted 2000-08-05 05:37 PM

Welcome to Passions Lurdburger.

This is a very good poem. I love it! Great style I say...well...keep up the good stuff, looking forward to read more of your poems.

God bless

Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

Salooma
Senior Member

since 2000-01-28

Posts 781

5 posted 2000-08-06 12:06 PM

great poem...so true...!
kinda hard when you're a kid, but at times you don't wanna be and then other times you do cause you can't decide....
good luck with it all and keep on writing!

Salooma

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 2000-08-06 02:47 PM

Welcome to Passions Lurdburger!

This is a well-thought out and thought-provoking verse ...
What a wonderful first post!

(check your e-mail for a special message)

Best wishes,
/Kit

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