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Tara Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76Minnesota |
I don't want to feel so alone anymore. I wish I had someone to talk to, who could understand. But no one does. No one [This message has been edited by Tara (edited 08-03-2000).] |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
So simple..but meaningful. Beautiful..you could call it "Alone" I wrote a poem called Alone that was short and simple like this one..I just never posted it. Because it was something I wanted to keep to myself. But remember you're not alone, ever. Keep your chin up and keep smiling =) ~!*DancinQueen*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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LoveAll Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 148B'dale, USA |
I like this a lot...you could call it "Emptiness". Always remember that you are never alone...God is always there to listen! Jesus loves you no matter what you do, or what happens. Anyway, beautiful poem!  "Of all those arts in which the wise excel, Nature's chief masterpiece is writing well." ~Essay on Poetry, John Sheffield "Those who hope in the |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
I like the to-the-point nature of this one. Really interesting although brief. I agree with Dancin'Queen...Alone is a great title for this piece. Ever need to talk feel free to email me @ salooma@ureach.com Great piece Salooma |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey great one. I think "Alone" would work. I can totally relate to the poem too. Very nice keep it up Bel |
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*ChrisLover* Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 46erie, colo |
hey there tara.... that was a fast and easy way of expressing feelings, i liked it!! i hope you have better luck and just stay out there cuz there is someone who will care for you like you want.... and they'll fullfill every dream you have... you just gotta keep your head up!! k? love janette Everything happens for a reason.. sometimes it's bad, but sometime it's good!! just remeber there's people out here who care! |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
Short but good. I have to agree "Alone" would make a good title. Keep up the work. Jeanna "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls." ~Voltaire~ |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
I disagree with the title being alone, I would name this poem... Silence surrounds me... -- to me that would be used instead of "alone" you know what I mean? -jess- |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
Silence Surrounds Me... |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Hollow... On My Own... Without Solace... Bitter Independence... Anything? I'm just throwing out possiblities. Jenn |
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The_Driven Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 60 |
I agree with the first suggestion. I also feel that a good title for this poem would be "Alone" Fetch me another plaything, this one seems to have broken! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
"Silent Speaker" would be a nice title I think. Lemme know what you think! Great work, short and to the point. Sometimes thats all you need to release feelings. Love, ,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_., |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
Perhaps 'an unfelt existence'? That is my suggestion I hope you like it and by the way, it's short and nice |
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lupigirl Junior Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 19Mequon, Wisconsin |
Silent Song (I love titles that are oximorons!!) Great thoughts... my thoughts are often the same, but don't worry, there's someone out there for you!!! SMILE!! |
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