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Lani_DarkOne
Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 152
UK

0 posted 2000-07-25 02:13 PM

Life's devoid.
Screaming girls aspire for womanhood,
Paint their faces
Mask our haunting insecurity
Of rejection.

Cling to stone truths
Prophetic speculation of God and society
Derived from bedtime stories
Of bogeyman, heaven
Consequences of
disobedience.

Head burst through stone,
Shattering divine dreams of
     enlightenment.
Scarring compliant face by  edged flint,
Witnessed infinite stretches of
         stone dead humanity.

Through blood streaming down my face,
Laughed at all indifferent souls
Striving to achieve perfection, A*,
      recognition.
Snared in their own personal tomb
Evading reality of
    who we really are.

My  lone head   escaped an inflicted grave
Scenery of neverending slabs of
  grey
Depressing, but consoling.
Await for another to aim for the sky
To
break
free.

"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

sherm
Member

since 2000-07-21

Posts 94
Evansville,IN

1 posted 2000-07-25 05:22 PM

i love your poem there are so many people where i live that are all the same and even many of the ones that are not popular are the same in trying to be unpopular hardly anyone seems to be themselves

sherm
Member

since 2000-07-21

Posts 94
Evansville,IN

2 posted 2000-07-25 05:23 PM

i love your poem there are so many people where i live that are all the same and even many of the ones that are not popular are the same in trying to be unpopular hardly anyone seems to be themselves

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2000-07-25 10:30 PM

Very in-depth Lani! You've explored so many facets within this verse ... very well done ... a thought-provoking read!

Best wishes,
/Kit

thebeautybrat
Member

since 2000-03-30

Posts 114
Florida

4 posted 2000-07-25 11:50 PM

i loved this poem!! it has a great message that you should be yourself!! i hope to read more of your poems and don't forget to see some of mine and comment on them!!

It is better to have loved and lost, than to never have loved at all.

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

5 posted 2000-07-26 01:38 PM

Great work Lani! Excellent poem. I love it, it is sooo true. People these days don't worry anymore about who they are, all they care about is what the world thinks about them. It is sad actually, cause most of the times, they are the unhappy ones.

Keep up the great stuff.

Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

6 posted 2007-12-03 09:38 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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