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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
...a little help with a title please?..and how do i use my signature? ----------------- the glare of the mirror shines in your eyes you can see the world through one tiny hole in the sky amongst the dirt and amongst the hurt you notice one little light that is shinging so bright to cling to that savior which is your hope is taking a chance and learning to cope i wish i could eat my own cancerous tumor and forget about all the detrimental rumors i take one last glimpse of the world but everywhere i look i've lost my pearl the decay of all my own optimism i see now that i am locked in a prism there is only one last thing to do to jump and pray that you won't live to your dismay it seems desperate and it seems repulsive but now it just seems that you'll have to accept it [This message has been edited by anomaly187 (edited 06-16-2000).] |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
The signature? There's a box below the reply or post box that says show signature -- click it. About your poem I can relate. How about "Optimism forgotten" for a title? Crystal "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive. Because when you love someone you control their version of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact, not their true situation at all." It's not the angry words that break the heart, it's the silence. Someone said that true love is like a ghost -- often spoke of but never seen. I've seen both and yet in my darkest hours, tend to believe that neither exits. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WOW!!! Again, your way with words just astounds me. It just makes me feel like I don't belong in the same forum as you. "amongst the dirt and amongst the hurt you notice one little light that is shinging so bright" You show strong feelings/emotions in your poems. keep writing as I go down the list of your poems. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow, great expression anomaly. This really has me thinking. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This poem gave me the sense of hopelessness. I liked the poem a lot. i thought it was great, and yet another ryhming one. You're full of ryhme today eh?  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This one is easier for me to grasp... maybe I'm just tired today!! But I understand that hopeless, aching feeling. I'm sorry you're feeling like this. I like... "Optimism Forgotten" Jenn "He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright |
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