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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again 
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*this is a very old repost. actually, this was my first post here. i hope y'all dig it. oh, and a somnambulist is "one who acts in their sleep".it is often a synonym for sleepwalker. although a somnambulist usually does more than walk... anywho, that's enough outta me. here it is, another heartache-y poem.* *somnambulist* Your face is dancing around my eyes as I close them and try to sleep tonight. I replay the day’s events in my mind. What was it I did wrong this time? I breathe in the air and drift away to that place where we first met. My arm around you, we laugh and talk. But I haven’t left my bed. Your voice when you laugh, it sounds so warm. Hold you close; I’ll never let go. My ears wake up; I’m talking to the ceiling. Look through the dark; I’m clutching a pillow. *We walk to your car…* I walk down the hall. *My shoe looks untied…* trip on the cat and fall. *When you talk, I hear a jumbled noise…* shouldn’t have left the radio on. you hide it all behind a smile. i'd open my eyes, but you'll be gone. Why did I latch on so quickly? it’s just that misery that lasts. You mumble the answers in my sleep, but in my dreams you talk too fast. And I hate to put any words in your mouth, but you won't ever talk to me. We can never walk alone, unless I’m walking in my sleep. I never get a straight answer from you. you spin my heart around. My dreams can never remember those times that you turn me down. Sometimes my self acts out my dreams. I walk around when I sleep. But I think your sleep is restless too, because you kill me every time I sleep. < !signature--> We all got our demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. [This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 07-12-2000).] |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Well, once again...I'm envious. The way you (as well as many writers in here) can relay the images so clearly cleverly is something that I can never seem to achieve. You are easily one of my fav writers. please keep posting in here...I love it. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"We can never walk alone, unless I’m walking in my sleep." I really liked that line above Ethan! Well thought-out poem ... very nicely penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
You did an excellent job at putting that dream, sleepy, don't wanna wake up idea in my head. very very good. I do hope that you continue to post in here. jason  |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
thank you all kindly for the replies. they are greatly appreciated. jeremy: my friend, you are wonderfully talented. my hat's off to you every time i catch a post of yours. you keep it up too! =) thanks again all. "The bar is always open and the time is always right. If god's word goes unspoken, then the music plays all night." -Bradley Nowell |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
ethan wonderful poem I really liked this one!! greath writing  |
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Kittie Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 103 |
I've read some of the poems you've posted, and you have great talent. The 7th stanza is wonderful, I really like it and can't really say how much I do. Keep up the great work. Kittie |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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