Teen Poetry #3 |
Wrong |
Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
You've hurt me so many times You've chipped away at my heart forever But I cast it aside,because we are in love,right? You've betrayed me and left me cold You've left me alone and in tears But i cast it aside,because we are in love,right? You've broken so many promises You've said so many cruel words But i cast it aside,because we are in love,right? You've lied to me over and over You've made me feel small and insignificant But i cast it aside,because we are in love,right? WRONG |
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mr0001 Junior Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 39 |
once again -- wonderful!!! the way you wrote this one really helps the ending have such a powerful effect!! can't wait to read more mr "crazy" is just who you are...amplified. some people draw the outlines in life, i chose to add the color. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey! I just thought this was great and should be read by some new people. I love the ending!! ~Carly "I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
So hey yea i agree wit child.....this did need more replies and here i am to do so. Eneh Weh this poem was interesting and i did like it a lot. The formatting was nice and the ending was a quick finish to it all.....strong too "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
That's right it's wrong!!!! Powerful message here "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very cool poem!! Hellz yeah its wrong to be treated that way...People get blinded by love and convince themselfes that this is all apart of love and the person only does such things cause they love them....then finally they come to see thats not how love is and what the other person is doing is WRONG. You send out a very powerful point!! Good job!! |
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