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anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

0 posted 2001-01-10 08:51 AM

How can you know what you have done?
A rightous soul such as yours,
Could not have pushed,
Such a force away.
The single note that played your heart,
Is not one for you to swing like a branch,
Do you think treading water is harder,
Than swimming against a current?

An unexpected visitor,
Stomped your sickened soul,
Do the birds still chirp in your world,
When it flips to a darkened side of your mind?
Can you keep the spindle of animosity up long enough,
To see to the end of your time?
Can your road bend in all directions,
Like your hurtful chain of thought?

Your memories break you up,
Lighting a path of un rippened sight.
Your distinction between reality and fantasy,
Is it all a game to you?
How many tears have rolled,
Under your bridge of pride?
Do you know you still cause destruction,
Even when they are still armed with shields?

A dreamer like you,
Is a creature breed by nightfall demons.
Your protection for your soul,
Is nothing but a pile of lies.
A mirror is held up to your face,
What do you see?
Can you see straight through the glass revealing,
A mere child talking in rhyme?

What is more painful,
Than an existence fuelled by hate?
Or perhaps knowing that everything you hold,
Isn't really yours at all.
It is actually mine,
Standing up you'll see it too.
For when you look in the reflection,
We are actually one,
A mirror talking back.

I am not sure if everyone is going to get what I am saying here, but hope you all enjoy. Its alot of srambled thoughts.

"Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-01-10 01:23 PM

Hey i liked this one. The ending especially. Wonderful job on it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Poet on Acid
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since 2001-01-07

Posts 325
Florida, USA

2 posted 2001-01-10 04:51 PM

wow, our minds are on a different wavelength but it was still a gret poem, I don't really grasp the whole picture but it's still strongly worded. Keep writing.

"Happiness is nothing without the contrast of sadness" -Me

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-01-10 05:20 PM

This poem, for some reason (perhaps the lecturesque theme about it) reminded me of a book in the Christian bible called "Job." I kept thinking that, was it just me?
A great reflective piece, as always. Your reflection can be mean to you, but don't be afraid to listen to what it says to you. The face that we see most rarely is our own, both literally and symbolically speaking.
Keep up the great work, I'm really enjoying yours so far, anonymousfemale.
-Allan

GirlsBestFriend
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since 2000-12-27

Posts 71
Planet Earth

4 posted 2001-01-10 06:21 PM

like what Poet on Acid said...I didn't understand everything but I give point on that! best wishes AF.

~lotsa luv

"Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world"

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

5 posted 2001-01-11 01:45 PM

I don't think I really caught all of the meaning to this one. I did like some of the thoughts you included!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

6 posted 2001-01-12 10:43 PM

Wow this is really cool and insightful! Great work

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

7 posted 2001-01-16 05:17 PM

I'm going to put this in my library and ponder it, moment after moment...because I loved the wording and the flow, and I'm determined to find everything it means, to me.
~Carly

inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog...

Virgil
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since 2000-12-29

Posts 43
Toronto, Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2001-01-16 06:01 PM

Good Poem! well written and insightful...good job!

"By other ways, by other ferries, not here, shalt thou pass over: a lighter boat must carry thee."

"I AM CANADIAN!!"

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