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Pass the Salt
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Pass the Salt |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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Lacerations of my kindness Float about my nightmares Anger tastes too bitter on my tongue. The English-speaking universe Got up on the wrong side of the bed Where dreaming heads once slept. Lacerations of the dreams are felt By World's hellish flames. Dreamers are replaced with lonely Depressed-stricken nightmare-thinkers. Armed with cold sarcasm And razored safety pins My zombies hold me close. Never let me go... Lacerations of my selfishness Are forced into my gaping wounds. Pass the salt, let's make it worse. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Like I said before, this is great. However I will not pass you salt. I will pass you a bandaid. Hope your nightmares become beautiful dreams. Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Thank you J...Could I have a pretty one with blue swirlies on it?? inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Wow. This is my favourite of yours so far, Child of the Stars. Great expressions of sorrow. Keep them coming. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this one is very well worded, great job on it! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
im wordless.. i cant say how much your writing is truely enjoyable... keep it up, please! best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great carly. nice one here......i like the last line. *gives you 5*  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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