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Morouxshi San
Member

since 2000-10-11

Posts 207
San Juan, Puerto Rico

0 posted 2000-10-28 12:11 PM

-=Bait=-

unsettling in the fast currents.
it moves, it moves.
not wanting to let go.
the cable holds, the cable holds.
swimming trough the fish.
becoming torn, becoming torn.
pulled back to the surface.
it now awaits another plunge.
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San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

[This message has been edited by Morouxshi San (edited 10-28-2000).]

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2000-10-28 12:15 PM

San my point has been proven......you write about these little things like bait, chairs, stools, armpit hair, and toe fungus in ways that portray them to be the most deepest things on the planet earth. It's like you turn an ordinary object and morph it into this poem with cosmic, never-ending meaning.
Good job San........I just might be in love with you......or not

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

2 posted 2000-10-28 01:01 PM

Well, all I can think of to say is WOW. See ya..

~Carly

The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of.

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2000-10-28 04:15 PM

Dopey's right, and I really like the poem. Good job

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2000-10-29 07:48 PM

I have much respect for someone who could write about other things besides feelings of love or hate. I too agree with Dopey

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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