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jytree
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0 posted 2000-10-25 10:50 AM


Here we go again,
Its all down to me,
Will I plunder things or will I be free,

Life is like a anoying voice inside your head,
and the only way to get rid of it is to be dead,
And that just sucks,

Here we go with the same turn of events,
life make you feel sometime unspecial more in my case like A vent.

life just sucks everybody knows,
It is as fun as watching a mokey hanging upside while I freak jabges him in the ribs saying injoy the show,

Life is crule in many ways,
Almost like catching razor blades,

Somehow we are here again,
And it is up to me again,
TO talk the talk,
Walk the walk,
Maybe teach kids how to use clauk.


early to rise,
early to bed,
make a man healthy,
But socially dead-Dot animantics.

Poems are F.U.B.U
( for us by us.)----ME


© Copyright 2000 Michael Jay vaughn - All Rights Reserved
jytree
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1 posted 2000-10-25 10:52 AM


Just to be honest I was in a silly state of mind while writting this one so laugh please

early to rise,
early to bed,
make a man healthy,
But socially dead-Dot animantics.

Poems are F.U.B.U
( for us by us.)----ME


chic
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2 posted 2000-10-25 12:40 PM


*Laughingly*  Great poem it kinda sounds like you were laughing while you wrote it if you read it just right.  

"Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me!

jytree
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3 posted 2000-10-25 12:46 PM


your correct I was being a brat like always

early to rise,
early to bed,
make a man healthy,
But socially dead-Dot animantics.

Poems are F.U.B.U
( for us by us.)----ME


Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2000-10-25 02:09 PM


well jytree this was amusing, especially your monkey part.
keep writing monkey!!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-10-25 03:48 PM


Well I didn't take it as being silly, but I can see it now.  I guess I just need to lighten up   Nice job with this one

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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6 posted 2000-10-25 04:16 PM



  Hey. This was great. My fave line: And that just sucks. hehe..keep up the great wording. ciao!

   ~Carly

The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of.


chic
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7 posted 2000-10-26 12:28 PM


Well Jay the only thing I can say is "It takes a brat to know a brat." So I guess....I must confess I'm a brat

"Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me!

Isabel Galaxia
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8 posted 2000-10-26 09:10 PM


That was great!!  I'm not sure I got it all, eventhough I read it a couple times.  Yup I'm tired.  A monkey huh?   It's weird, yet it's good  .  Alright, well, keep it up okay?
Bel

jytree
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9 posted 2000-10-27 11:40 AM


Thanks everybody for replying dopey A monkey is how I feel but not who I am and chic you said it but I'm bratter .

early to rise,
early to bed,
make a man healthy,
But socially dead-Dot animantics.

Poems are F.U.B.U
( for us by us.)----ME


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