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Six Hours |
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Estrella New Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 8 |
The clock chimed once, An hour later, a second time It was barely minutes Yet it went again, Again, And one more time, Before it called out Six loud chimes Minutes whizzed by, hours flew Six hours faded into the night Six hours of small talk, Six hours of nothing but words mercilessly blown away by the cold, icy wind But those were the moments of warmth... For they were Six hours of friendship Six hours of memories Deeply etched in my mind |
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Estrella New Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 8 |
I wrote this poem after talking to a male friend for six hours on end. It was really a wonderful experience, sharing our thoughts and feelings. But it came across as rather surprising though, as I've never talked to anyone for such a long time before, let alone someone of the opposite sex... |
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Novacaine For The Soul Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122New Orleans |
dear estrella, this is absolutely lovely... i, too, have had experiences like the one described here and it's truly an incredible thing to delve so deep into the heart and mind of another... i hope that your friendship with this person has remained beyond the six hours you've so vividly described here... sincerely, a sad tomato you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you... |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Hey, this one has a pretty interesting concept...the value of talking and the period of time and the essence of it. I believe in talking. The way you put the focus on the time and how it passed added the feeling to the idea...nice recipe. Jeremy Halstead |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
This is beautiful! You've so well described the essence of time which it can be difficult to do. Isn't it amazing how time can be everything or nothing at all? Sometimes we take advantage of time, but in the essence of it it's just so priceless. ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** |
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