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On a dark hill
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On a dark hill |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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I stand on a dark hill stunned by fate, as the stars crawl upon the sky, I wonder how you hurt me so As the pine trees roar with the wind I laugh a bitter laugh asking the wild black oceans so many questions, it seems eons ago I walked to the top of this dark hill can this hill feel my agony surging through its layers can the center of it all feel the beats of my broken heart the air spicy and still tickling my nose For I have walked many hills, this hill is the one sprinkled misty red with the shadows of dawn, for this I stand on a dark hill stunned by fate. ~Ina~ I posted this I think a long time ago under my other name of passions forum |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very powerful....I all too often have been "stunned by fate" as you put it so well. Exellent work, I really enjoyed reading this one.  *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
You are like, the Emperess of Imagery. I admire your skill and emotion. 'Black oceans'.... that was awesome. Peace out! *~Meredith~* I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one a lot. You are very good at imagery...... keep it up ina!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Your strong wording really gets the point across here, well done. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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