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Are You Alive? |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina 
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Watching as You pack your things Telephone That never rings A silence falls Crawling underneath my skin Sticks and stones And shadows fly Slam the door Don't say goodbye A lonliness that lives within Now I find I'm Standing still My hands untied My world unreal And I with nothing More to feel Would say to you Humanize me Realize me Don't look away Patronize me Hypnotize me Follow me as I run crying Farther and farther away From this empty room Where I once loved you Held your gaze Became part of you I'll be back someday Angry words I hear you say Long ago But still they lay Upon my heart As lethal as you spoke them Tender lies Oh so well said Memories Float through my head All broken now And no one to provoke them Now I find I'm letting go A stronger me You'd never know And you with nothing More to throw Would find a way Humanize me Realize me Don't walk away Patronize me Hypnotize me Follow me as I run screaming Farther and farther away From this empty room Where I once loved you Kissed your tears Now rise above you I'll be back someday I already know you can't fade I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Holy Cow! This in all is one of the BEST poems I have read it had this vibe to it and somehow it all mad perfect sense wow keep up the great writting I love this one "what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
This was incredible...wow....I mean wow...I'm dazzled.... ~Carly Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line. I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought the poems format and style was realy really good. The poem in general was kick ass. I just thought it was an all around poem. Not too many of those here. Good job!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Wow this is extremely good. you truly have talent!  Curlz "i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky" enrique iglesias |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is awesome poetry, you're really good and this poem is amazing. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Whoa...That was an incredible poem! Everything flowed so nicely!!! You have incredible talent, i think i read that poem like 3 times and i enjoyed it more and more each time! Great job! |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
WOW!! that was awesome!! I really liked that! Keep writing!!! Much love, Priscilla ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Now this is really well written. I love your style in writin gpoems. It really is different. Keep writing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
It is always a pleasure to read your work. Kudos on a job well done. |
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