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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
Fighting endlessly for want cause, What cause is worth the lives I have killed, The families I have destroyed, What justifaction can I tell myself that what I am doing is right, I do what I am told to but at what price, My solider's honor is smeared with blood of the victums I have slaughter in the name of peace and justice, Every step on this battlefield I am on I see them lined everyone I have killed for money or for power, God will judge me and only him because of fear, My pride is torn, My honor shot, All I am now is a robot, Unable to love because I live in death, May the familes forgive me when I kille their little boy, May the old widow forgive me when I killed her husdand and may God forgive when my wife took her own life with my sword, My God forgive me when I do the same. early to rise, early to bed, make a man healthy, but socially dead. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This poem seemed powerful to me, it's very good. Thank you for sharing it!  |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Indeed this was powerful. Wonderful, wonderful job. ~Carly Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line. I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a good poem, pretty good.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
WOW this was a very strong poem! very well-written! Curlz "i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky" enrique iglesias |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Lots of emotins streaming from this poem. I got a lot out of this because I loked into it and found the things I never would have thought to look for. The Judgement thing...God judges only because we deserve nothing but what we commit. But like they say "all sins are to be forgiven" so I guess all you gotta do is asked to be forgiven and you shall be...For some reason I don't believe its that easy. Anyways, just my opinions...Thank you for sharing this you have done an excellent job!! --anxiously awaiting more-- ~*~Jessica~*~ p.s. I just noticed that you registered on my birthday!! hehehe --not that you care, just thought I would mention it~*~Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference...~*~ |
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