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Teen Poetry #3

sweet departure

shadydaze
Member

since 2000-10-02

Posts 85

0 posted 2000-10-04 12:56 PM

I could've made your dreams come true
I would've gave my world for you
but you kept running,
running away
now you're lost, you've gone astray
keep your distance, don't come back
no U-turns on this one way track
I'm not sorry that you're gone
thanks for leaving me alone

shadydaze
Member

since 2000-10-02

Posts 85

1 posted 2000-10-04 12:59 PM

IF SHE ONLY KNEW THE LOVE I HAD FOR HER.
NOW I DESPISE HER FOR MY WOUNDED HEART.

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

2 posted 2000-10-04 01:31 AM

Shadydaze~
Some people dont realize what they lost until its gone...And its sad but true...Well shes gone not point in living in the past...Its hard not to but you got the future to look forward to...Like girls that arent gonna do this to you...I smiled at one part though...

This part: no U-turns on this one way track

I like that part...Good job!!!

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2000-10-04 03:28 PM

This is awesome, it's so expressive, yet short. And it flows well and I like the feeling behind it. Great writing.

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