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jytree
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0 posted 2000-09-29 09:40 AM


I have lived the life brought to me by so many thing,
Standing, Walking, Sitting, Reading are all things we learn in life.

But what happens if we stray away,
To fall as if it would be fun,
If you desire that so be it but let me warn you,
the path your on stay on for life is crule and unfair,
For we everyone dies around you and you stand living yet dead.

For I am in the group yet you cannot reach me,
For too many things haunt me so.

So that is why I just stand alone.


early to rise,
early to bed,
make a man healthy,
but socially dead.

© Copyright 2000 Michael Jay vaughn - All Rights Reserved
Virgin Suïcide
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1 posted 2000-09-29 11:25 AM


it's true, you can stand alone when you're surrounded by a lot of ppl... strange, but true... know the feeling!!
great work!!!

luvz, VS


All of my life
Where have you been
I wonder if I'll
Ever see you again

~*~*~Lenny Kravitz-Again~*~*~

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2 posted 2000-09-29 01:30 PM


this one is deep. i do think that our paths are not really paved yet and its all up to us to pave it. Great write and keep posting  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Angelwings
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3 posted 2000-09-29 02:02 PM


Great writing and oh so totally true!  Hope to read another one of your good poems!
Angelwings
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4 posted 2000-09-29 02:02 PM


Great writing and oh so totally true!  Hope to read another one of your good poems!
Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-09-29 03:05 PM


This is great jytree!  I really like it, nice job writing this one
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6 posted 2000-09-29 03:12 PM



  Hey! This was very cool!! What?? No dancing baby???? hehe... happy writing.

   ~Carly

Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line.
I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine...

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7 posted 2000-09-29 04:14 PM


Good job jytree, but i found some of wording quite confusingly put. I don't know.
Anyway keep it up



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
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8 posted 2000-09-30 11:13 AM


what a wondeful post Jytree! Your thoughts are expressed well here. I was very impressed! As for what Dopey said, I think that the wording makes sense....but I am also a confusing person, easily understanding other confusing people. Anyways, confusion gives it character. Best of luck!
Love Always
~*~Star~*~


~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~

curlygurly
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9 posted 2000-09-30 01:42 PM


this poem was very good and it really made a lot of sense. good job!  
Curlz


"i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky"
enrique iglesias


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