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Teen Poetry #3

Closing in on Me

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

0 posted 2000-09-19 09:03 PM

This world surrounds me,
It is closing in on me,
Preparing me for an eternal blackness.
Eternal emptiness.

Yet I smiled at the black hole,
and laughed at the wind that burns me.
My face stings, my nose is crimson-tinted.
The days are circular;
My never ending wishful thinking.

This is a poem I wrote a while ago... with a few minor alterations... I never got to post it, so here you all go. Hope you like!
Jenn

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

1 posted 2000-09-19 09:07 PM

I liked this one a lot!! I think we all feel like this at some point in our lives. I too smile even when I am not smiling on the inside. This was wonderful and very true. Keep it up I do enjoy reading!

Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~

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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2000-09-20 03:10 PM

I liked the crimson-tinting. I like a lot of the wording in this poem. I'd like to see this style more often.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

JandR4Eva
New Member

since 2000-09-20

Posts 9
Jacksonville, FL

3 posted 2000-09-20 08:56 PM

I enjoyed reading your poem, and I thank you for reading mine. I believe we all make a difference in everyone. Keep up the good work!

*You may find love, but true love is hard to find!*
~J

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