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Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

0 posted 2000-09-16 12:41 PM

un beso,
debajo una cieba,
que se convirtio en
mucho mas

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2000-09-16 02:54 AM

A kiss
under a cieba
that converted into
many more

Ok so.....i know Cieba is a type of tree. Very nice. But what is the general point of this poem?

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

2 posted 2000-09-17 01:04 AM

Actually, a better translation might be:

A Kiss
under a cieba
that became
so much more.

(notice that mucho is singular, and not plural)

no particular point, these are just some words that leaked from my pen, onto my notebook at three in the morning the other night.

frankly, I'm in a bit of a block.

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

3 posted 2000-09-17 01:27 AM

I thought "besos" meant hugs & kisses???Anyways I must be going crazy...LOL Such a sweet poem though!!!Keep it up Jose...

~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2000-09-17 02:51 PM

I liked this a lot, keep writing these great poems

!!!
Member

since 2000-08-12

Posts 137
VA (U.S.A)

5 posted 2000-09-17 06:13 PM

Pretty nice poem, maxx. So youre in a block huh? Well in your response to dopey dope's response, you mentioned about how those words just flowed from your ink pen. Perhaps you could write a poem solely on how words flow from your inkpen or something along those lines, possibly...

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

6 posted 2000-09-18 09:45 PM

Jose- Short and sweet, I liked it.

Hey, I'm in a "writers" block too. Good luck

Hasta Luego
Bel

Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
-"Beautiful" CREED

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