»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #3
»
Something Worth Believing in
| Teen Poetry #3 |
|
Something Worth Believing in |
|
|
Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Hey guys!!! I've been away from the forum for a LONG time! But I'm gonna try and be better about posting and replying now! For those of you I know, I look forward to hearing from you again, and for those of u who I don't know, I hope you like my work, and I look forward to reading yours  K, here's my latest! Love ya all! ~Kandi~ Something Worth Believing In Bend the heart until it breaks Just to see how long it takes Before a grip on the edge starts to give. Not a single word is spoken Don't let them know a heart is broken Just pretend to love this life you live. I'd offer a hand if I had one to spare But mine are busy clutching at air Desperately seeking something to pull me up. All I need is someone to save me To bring back the hope somebody once gave me And I'm turning to you because I'm thinking you might be enough. Don't turn away I'm tired of screaming just to know somebody can hear me. Say you'll stay I can't keep dreaming that there's someone who wants to be near me. Look at me Just so I can feel like there's something beautiful about me again. Believe in me because I need to know there's still something worth believing in. ~*All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe *~ ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Kristin - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome Back Kandi! You've expressed yourself well in this emotional poem. Very powerful reading, well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
||
|
sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that was awesome! I liked that alot, great poem, keep writing! Luv, ~*~sweetstuff~*~ ~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~ |
||
|
qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Wow this is great Great poetry to me is stuff that I can relate to, & see pieces of me in. This definatly fits! Great poem! LOVE ELMO <3 |
||
|
Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Kandi~~~WOW!!!This was really good!!!I like it alot...I cant wait to see more... ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
||
|
Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Hey, this poem got better and better every line, by the end I was loving it. Great work. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
||
|
Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Hey there girlie!!! I'm quite impressed...I don't know if that's something that yer actually dealing with right now or not....but I am, and let me say that you worded it quite nicely.....thanx fer the reply...later Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
||
|
StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Hey my girl!! It's been forever!! Im glad to see you back!! This was Awesome!! Keep 'em coming and I'll keep a readin ok? Luv Ya bunches Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ :) If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. :) |
||
|
Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
wow!! glad that you're back (although I've never seen you) but your poem is just grEAt!!!!!! luvs, VS I dream about how it's gonna end Approaching me quickly Living a life of fear I only want my mind to be clear... ~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~ |
||
Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I can't swallow my spit....bla.... ok anyway....this poem was very nice. I liked it tons and tons. I liked the ryhme scheme, kept me on my toes. The message of the poem was wonderful. keep posting or I'LL be sad.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
||
|
Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Kandi- I look forward to reading more of your poems! I liked this one |
||
|
DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey! Welcome back...ive been gone from the forums for a LONG time too...but im trying to post and reply more. BUT NEWHO...i really liked this poem. Goes in my book of favs keep writing!~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
||
|
anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
amazing poem Kandi...i totally loved it..and welcome back..i remember you...thank you, come again. "'I am the the lizard king I can do anything I can make the earth stop in its tracks I made the blue cars go away |
||
|
Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Good job here. You expressed yourself well. I look forward to reading more. Jenn Dopey- what was the spit thing all about...? yuck! "He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright |
||
|
LoveAll Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 148B'dale, USA |
That was really amazing...thank you so much, that is exactly what I needed to read today. I'm feeling some of the same feelings and its great to read something like that. Wonderful poem! God Bless Those who hope in the Lord will renew their strength. They will soar on wings like eagles; run and not grow weary, walk and not be faint. Isaiah 40:3 |
||
|
soulfulpoet Junior Member
since 2000-04-14
Posts 42ontario, canada |
this was SUCH a good poem...thank you for writing it andrea |
||
Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
like this much. very well written. every word true. love your signature. what's the first one from? The second is from the song dying to be alive, right? Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
||
|
Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Kandi, welcome back!!! beautiful poem, very emotional.... keep writing As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
