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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina 
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This poem was inspired by a certain individual that said he thought we needed a little variety in here. I wrote it during government while my teacher was lecturing on communism...... Breaking down Falling down Coming down to you Back on the ground Look around My God, I never knew It was so pretty Pretty Pretty Pretty down here It's been so many Many Many Many days since I've seen you Now I'm feeling Feeling Feeling Feeling like a story Where was I going when I found you? Sounding true Coming true So true, my brain's a mess What to do? Not a thing to do But now I must confess That you're so crazy Crazy Crazy Crazy like a painting So maybe Maybe Maybe Maybe what you're demonstrating Is perfect Perfect Perfect Perfect for my dark side What was I thinking when I found you? We both like poptarts And the Beastie Boys And nobody knows We still play with our toys We're such a scary Scary Scary Very scary couple But I like that just fine! *yeah, whatever! This one goes out to my dream guy, wherever the hell he is.....* I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
LOL, don't worry, you'll find him someday...I liked the images this one brought to my head and the repeated words made it an interesting read! Well done!  *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Ouch, those hurt. Lalallablah, You’re in Government? You poor baby!!! Don’t worry, it’ll all be over soon… . Yeah good luck on your quest for mister right, but you may have to settle for mister Ok… Blah ah allala connect the dots… --- Spreading insanity, one post at a time “Writing about darkness comes easily for me. I just close my eyes and write what I |
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sherm Member
since 2000-07-21
Posts 94Evansville,IN |
cool poem hope you find him some day |
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Lone Insomniac Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 45 |
heyy !!! this poem was great !!! if you are as great as your poem is, then I'm your man !! hahaha just kiddin..nop it was great poem cuz it was net like any other poem, and I like that !!! keep it up !! see ya, robin |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Hey kids, yeah I know: 'he's out there, just keep looking for him!' Well why's he hiding from me??? I don't bite. (at least not very often) Well, you know how it is, life's a beech. Deranger - yeah, government sucks a big one! Lone Insomniac - I'm not as great as my poem, but I'm about equal to my shoelaces! Peace guys. *~Meredith~* I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Hey Meredith, pop tarts and Beastie boys huh? Cherry or strawberry? And don't tell anyone about my GI-Joe collection. hehehe have fun!!!!!!!!! jason  Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Awesome post....title has to fit that. You're dream guy will be right in front of you when the time comes believe me, I can predict these things for other ppl. Unfortunatly I'm the one that gets jipped in the end Salma |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Jason - definately strawberry. And I think you just gave yourself away about the GI-Joes! Sal - I think I'm in the same boat as you..... *~Meredith~* I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is very different from all the others I've ever read. Different style, but I love it!!! It's nice to put standards on what kindda person you'dlike to be with, but remember never to find someone and try to mold them into your standards. It'll never work. Just a little advice As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
INspired by a guy who wanted a little variety? Oooooo...hehe. Anyway.... i liked the poem. Seriously, i applaud you for it. The style is pretty kick ass. I, for some reason, envision it being a song. Very nice poem, and it would a very nice song. hehe...keep it up! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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