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A promise I broke... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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I made a promise That long gone yesterday I made a promise To forget those love-filled days I gave you my word That nothing of then would remain I gave you my word That none of our story would I retain Oh! Those days in love Those lovely days when We were in each other's arms - Arm-in-arm we walked Down these very lanes As I walk on this day Alone and battered. Ah! These days in pain! I broke the promise That I had made that yesterday I broke the promise Of that to be forgotten hurting day I didn't keep that word To forget you and your love's peace I didn't keep that word To drown those pieces of memories Oh! But how could I? How could I have buried the past I hold so close to my chest steadfast? Can you tell the sun to stop its rising glance? Can you ask the butterfly not to do its dance? Can you ask the breeze not to blow its airs? Can you ask the moon to simply disappear? If you can do all that, then my dear, I will forget you and your love, Maybe, just maybe, but can you? Can you forget me or my love? Or have you already? I made a promise But I had to break it. I gave my word, But I couldn't keep it. |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
That is a really nice poem. It is real deep and meaningful. i hope everything works out for you When I met you I liked you When I liked you I kissed you When I kissed you I loved you When I loved you I lost you |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
That is a really nice poem. It is real deep and meaningful. i hope everything works out for you When I met you I liked you When I liked you I kissed you When I kissed you I loved you When I loved you I lost you |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
That is a really nice poem. It is real deep and meaningful. i hope everything works out for you When I met you I liked you When I liked you I kissed you When I kissed you I loved you When I loved you I lost you |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Sudhir, this brings to mind the many times I've felt this way. I especially liked the lines asking nature to just change they're course. You can ask, hope, and wish all you want but that does'nt mean its going to happen that way. I hope that it all works out for you. jason  Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Nice poem Sudhir! I'm sorry to hear you are feeling this way, e-mail me if you want. YOu know my address! ~*~SCG~*~ "Poetry is what makes the invisible appear"-Author Unknown |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Sudhir~~~Wow this is great!!  I really like the part where you put:Can you tell the sun to stop its rising glance? Can you ask the butterfly not to do its dance? Can you ask the breeze not to blow its airs? Can you ask the moon to simply disappear? That was really good!!And I hope that you keep posting here cause you write beautifully.  ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow..... that poem was great. It's the best one ive seen since i got on here. Anyway one question. I've been wondering how you got your picture up there? I want my picture up there too! Well tell me how, and thanks for posting that poem up there. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Nice to see ya posting at Teen again Sudhir. This was quiet a powerful piece....I hope you come out of that experience alright  Keep on posting at Teen, we need ya here!Salma |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Good to see ya here, Sudhir. This is a wonderful piece, but it's so heart-wretching. I hope this doesn't apply to your own life. Keep 'em coming! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful as always Sudhir! It's so great to see you here again. What a lovely verse of sentimental longing and regret. Very nicely penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
what a wonderful addition to my favorites!! You are so talented! Your words are so captivating! I hope everything works out for you!! As Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all my friends... Thank you so much... I will try to be on this forum as much as possible... but believe me it is difficult to keep up with all the forums' posts... and it is difficult to be away as well... but who said that life is simple, anyway  Many regards, sudhir. P.S. and Lavada thanks for the offer... you are such a good friend.... |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Anytime Sudhir, I always have time for my friends! ~*~SCG~*~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Lavada, so glad to hear that and know you as a friend... regards, sudhir |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
Sidhur*~ this poem is SO GOOD!!! keep up the good work!!! ~*Pixie*~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you so much, Pixie... My regards, sudhir |
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