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meimi
New Member

since 2000-08-13

Posts 4
Las Piñas City, Philippines

0 posted 2000-08-30 10:17 AM

         Left alone…


         Walking alone
         In the alley of despair
         Thinking of how happy it would be
         If you're here beside me

         Your comforting touch
         Your sweet, red lips
         Touching mine
         And making me feel complete

         But I'm all alone
         With no one to keep me warm
         No one to wipe my tears
         No one to love me

         It had been so long
         Since you said you love me
         Oh how I wish to hear again your voice
         Telling me you'll be with me forever

         Now standing in front of your grave
         Tears started falling from my eyes
         I knelt down, put my hands together
         And Pray for my beloved to rest in peace.
         I LOVE YOU!

~¤May the blessing of God
be with you always.¤~

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

1 posted 2000-08-30 12:57 PM

Wow this is so good...

I really do like it alot...And I cant wait to read more...God this is so good...Keep up the good work...

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~

sweetcollege_girl
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since 1999-12-03

Posts 872
just about where I want to be

2 posted 2000-08-30 01:11 PM

I ditto ERIN...This really was a great first post...Welcome to Passions! Keep up the good work!

~*~SCG~*~

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sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member

since 1999-12-03

Posts 872
just about where I want to be

3 posted 2000-08-30 01:12 PM

oops!

[This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 08-30-2000).]

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

4 posted 2000-08-30 02:56 PM

Great first poem keep up the awsome work!
Lauren

Kit McCallum

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Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2000-08-31 10:21 AM

Welcome to Passions!

We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. We look forward to having you share your efforts with us and please keep in mind that we are very supportive of each other. The pleasure you receive from reading comments on your work is the same pleasure others need by receiving your comments on theirs. This is a rule that all poets here follow. We invite you to join the family!

This is a wonderful first post Meimi .. so tender and sentimental. I saw your post in Q&A just now. I'm glad you were able to find your way here. Well done!

I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets here in the Forums!

Best wishes,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 08-31-2000).]

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

6 posted 2000-08-31 03:05 PM

Good job.... very heartfelt... can't wait for more!!
Jenn

Lovely_Kris
Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 176

7 posted 2000-09-01 10:41 PM

very good. I really like your poem and keepup the great work and hope to read more.
Lovely_Kris

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