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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA 
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Cruising along the freeway, No care in the world, Hitting a 90 , flying with the birds, I look in my mirror, Good, no cops in the rear, Flying past the old folks, Ignoring their angry looks, Popping a smile, As I think about it for a while, Suddenly out of nowhere I sight, Ahead of me a bunch of flashing red lights, As I hit the gas and come to a slow, This is where my journey hits a major blow. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
This is a good poem...Its different then the rest of the poems that are posted...But I dont understand the last line...What do you mean by it???Like you crashed of something???< !signature--> ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 08-29-2000).] |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
Yeah..this is a great poem..I liked the rhyming, and the words..but like Erin, I'm curious to know what the last line means.. "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
I have acheived my goal. Leave the reader to guess the ending. HAHA.  Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thats not right Xeonox...You as the writer should tell us the readers what its about...So spit it out already!!!  ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
But is it not fun for you as a reader to choose the ending anyway you like? Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Good suspenseful ending Xeonox! Keep us guessing, as it's up to the readers own interpretation. I've done that in a few poems too. Me? I prefer to interpret this as a message to "Drive safely", because for every action, there is an equal and opposite reaction. Crash ... ticket? You made us think ... either way ... good suspense! Best wishes, /Kit |
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