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Heart Dance |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
To open a hand in love is more than one can understand To let one fly to god knows where you must let go and die. It is so hard to make my heart be still like waiting in the trenches just before a kill. The panic of wanting to run to scream to the other that their life is out and the gauntlet has run. To know the depth of what I speak I’d replace my life for her without a peep. I’d take that bullet without a second glance knowing she’d live life a heart dance. Please come back to me my one and true love give me this chance to step in front of you my last heart dance. To W. D. all my love. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Trisha4_u Junior Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 28 |
Joel, I understand...truely I do! |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Joel, I really like this one. A lot of depth  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Joel, such heart ache excellently written. I’d take that bullet without a second glance knowing she’d live life a heart dance. Please come back to me my one and true love give me this chance to step in front of you my last heart dance. wow...intense and a great poem. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso "We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde ----- |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
Wow. So intense, passionate, and self-sacrificial. Excellent. "Suicides have already betrayed the body. Still born, they don't always die, bu dazzled, they can't forget a drug so sweet that even children would look on and smile." -- "Wanting to Die" by Anne Sexton Adversity Builds character. - Japanese Proverb "'Even a fool has one talent'.....darn, I'm not even a fool." - My sister, the master of cunning wit |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I guess when someone say's that they would take a bullet for there loved one, most don't really know what that means, not if they had never seen death up close, I have I've known this end result many times, and have kissed deaths lips several times. I love White Dove with all my heart, and without a second between I'd do it. Thanks for all the replys. very much. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
I see your love for her is intense and strong i long for that same type of love. i had to print this one. great job keep it up. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
That was QUITE a heartfelt poem! Nicely done. I certainly hope she comes back to you. We are the hollow men We are the stuffed men Leaning together Headpiece filled with straw. Alas! Our dried voices, when We whisper together Are quiet and meaningless As wind in dry grass Or rats' feet over broken glass In our dry cellar Shape without form, shade without color, Paralyzed force, gesture without motion; --T.S. Eliot |
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hunter Junior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 22lex,ky |
your love is of the truest form.light and love go out to you |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Jermiah Johnson thanks guy, But do yourself a favor, don't long for this type of love, when the other doesn't give it back, it can be a pain like no other you have had in your life, I know. I've trained all my life in the martial arts to ?? do away with pain when it happens, I've been stabbed, sliced, clubbed, shot at, fallen off buildings, etc, etc., in demos I break bricks with an open back hand, like I said I've trained my whole life for pain, but non compare to the ripped heart of loneliness. So my friend don't wish for something like this. Fracta, thank you, and yes I also hope this with all my heart, she is my breath, and the beat of my heart. And God I miss her so. Hunter, thank you for the light/love, and I do know what love is, exception of who they are, not trying to change them, and the willingness to give my life in exchange for hers. Thank you all. again. unlike some, this is a true account of my life, it is an open book, I'm an open book. I just don’t know what I’ll do without my White Dove Joel< !signature--> I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. [This message has been edited by Joel the wolf (edited 06-18-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I am new to this site, but I found your words to be a reflection of all that is hard in love...the pain...the yearning...the wanting...all for what? To be hurt? But oh the highs the highs...It is well worth the pain...this kind of love |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I am new to this site but I had to reply to this...your words touch on all that is hard in love...the wanting..the needing...the pain...but oh the highs the highs...and your words touched on all that and more...wonderful |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Paula Finn, Paula Finn, thank you. yes Paula, the highs, You know I've never known lonelyness untill I knew her, and the highs were wonderful. she got scared Of me? of love? of herself. She sees my love, and knows it, one can't be blind to this, she is afraid of another heart break. So many men have let her down, I'm just going to have to build up that trust. and that's with patience. Thanks Paula. Thanks Paula hahaha Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I love this poem Joel...very strong and intense...you can feel the sincereity (grrr..I wish I could spell) in your every word...and believe me I know what you mean. I've been through that battle...getting past fear and pride..those annoying defenses that I've made for myself... but now I'm onto another one...good luck with your love and you're right...it will come with patience. Truly an excellent piece... D.E. Listen to your heart for it knows the way even when you don't. ~*Angel of Darkness*~ "So what are we, helpless? Puppets? No, the big moments are gonna come...you can't help that. It's what you do afterwards that counts. That's when you find out who you really are. You'll see what I mean..." -Whistler *+Daughter of Darkness+* |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Thank you so much, for your thoughts on this, I wish you luck with your new. And yes you are right, with patience I will win her trust, she has lost so much. Thanks again. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Your poems are always visualy pleasing,then the words come through and we truly see what is there to see. How can she not know what she means to you?? Good luck, and may she put your soul at ease!!! Click |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Joel,...Heart Dance,...I love the title. This is so uumm,,...I am running out of words for real and intense...and all that your work has been these days. You have my heart in your grip....wishing the pain would ease for you. She is your heart,...and I just wish it all were splashed in sunshine right now. Take care. *Peace. |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
click, thank you , but she does know what she means to me, she has said I love you to me many times, but is scared of it, she knows that I'm a sticker, no matter what, in good and bad, she just wants to fly right now. and god it's killing me. Spit, you mean so much to me kid. thank you, I have your heart in a high place. love ya. kid. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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