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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738
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I wander leisurely, observing I look over, admiring How wonderful, How magnificent you are! Slender graceful limbs Reaching up to the sky You dance, free. The wind blows harder, faster Your dance intensifies The rain beats down On your bare limbs. Excelling in your nakedness You appear to sing Your song of songs. The wind dies The rain disappears And you appear Once again Just to be a lovely tree... --- I adore the look of a tree... to lay under it's branches and stare at the sky, the clouds, and dream  PS: Written about a tree in Autumn (my favourite season) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I too love the autumn and I'm looking forward to reading more of your work then also. This was lovely Kathleen "How do I love thee? Let me count the ways. I love thee to the depth and breadth and height My soul can reach, when feeling out of sight For the ends of Being and ideal Grace." Elizabeth Barrett Browning |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Yes, I can just see the tree dancing in the storm, a beautiful image! You are exceptionally good at writing about nature, aren't you? Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I love the way you put the tree in the rain, I'd stand for hours under a great willow in the rain. Thank you for this. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Thanks for ths alright. Nature in her splendour nothing more beautiful. Wonderful imagery and feeling to this one! I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
the greatness of this poem i can't express. i to have two poems about tree's and i love the truth which is nature. great job I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Another tree lover... there is something magical about trees and I could go about them all day but I wouldn't really enjoyed your poem, a lovely piece. The wind blows harder, faster Your dance intensifies The rain beats down On your bare limbs. Excelling in your nakedness You appear to sing Your song of songs. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso "We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde ----- |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
That was some awesome imagery! I too enjoy looking at trees in a storm. In fact, just yesterday, we had a nice thunderstorm, and so I decided to take my dog for a walk in it. While on the walk, I noticed that the trees do, in fact, look much more beautiful in the storm. Also, they get even greener and brighter. This was some great poetry! You seem to be a very good conveyer of imagery. And, of course, you seem to have a great imagination!  We are the hollow men We are the stuffed men Leaning together Headpiece filled with straw. Alas! Our dried voices, when We whisper together Are quiet and meaningless As wind in dry grass Or rats' feet over broken glass In our dry cellar Shape without form, shade without color, Paralyzed force, gesture without motion; --T.S. Eliot |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Wow...Autumn is my favorite season too!!! I also love being around trees!! Beautiful!!! Thanks for sharing this!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Beautiful, Tara. Although I admit I didn't know it was about trees until the end...but then some poets do that, don't they? Hardrock |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Tara, I did not see the tree till the end either. I was visualizing a glorious naked Adonis. Hm, see where my head is at Perfectly wonderful poem in every way. Cat.... |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Wow! Thank you everyone for your very kind comments.... I am quite overwhelmed |
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